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I Am the Failure
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Written by amanda   
Tuesday, 01 July 2008
 

I love everything about you,

How your eyes are the perfect shade of blue,

And how when you smile,

It lights up your face for a while.

 

I love the shape of your hand,

As it tries to grasp a world you don't understand,

Instead it cradles your head,

"I'm a failure," is all you've said.

 

I wish that your pain would heal,

But I don't have the courage to tell you how I feel.

I just need you to see,

That the only failure here is me.

Copyright 2008 amanda
Keyword: failure poetry
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Comments (16)
Posted by lemon
2008-07-01 13:07:53
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It was cool how you thought to make that last line smaller than the rest. Feeling like a failure sure does make one feel small eh? Good poem keep it coming =]
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-07-01 13:11:37
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Not sure I get this,,I mean i get it, but I don't. It seems we have two failures on our hands. I think we need a group hug.
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Posted by ams
2008-07-01 13:11:57
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oppps that was actually unintentional. i didnt even notice it. im not sure how that happened, i cut and pasted it from word.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-01 13:29:51
Oooppps?

Boy, never say 'oopps', just be cool and existential.

NEVER ADMIT TO A MISTAKE.

Make lots of them in my stuff, but Potter's the only bugger to spot them............grrrrrrrrrrr

Phil
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-01 13:57:14
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lol well then i guess i based my entire first comment on an accident eh? well, shit happens haha at least it was a good mistake. =]
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Posted by ams
2008-07-01 13:57:38
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haha potter. a group hug sounds fine, but for our own personal safety i think your sister should be left out of it. she might crush us all. jk ive been reading the forums.

ya, it is a confusing poem. ill leave it up to your interputation.

thanks phil for the advice. ill remember that next time
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-07-01 14:14:21
I can

most definitely relate to this poem. Good job!
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-01 20:59:05
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i didn't think this was confusing at all. i enjoyed it and understood it with ease.
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-07-02 01:49:03
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Wow this one was nice. yeah
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Posted by bubbly
2008-07-02 18:53:44
lovely!

hi! mandy.

that's a lovely and thoughtful poem. since u love everything about her/him, s/he is perfect. and that's what love can do to a person - being faultless.

loved the thought. lol. ;-)
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Posted by A.T.O.M.
2008-07-05 17:25:38
incredible

absolutely incredible
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-06 19:20:41
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I thought the rhymes were simple, but worked perfectly for this poem.

Sometimes accidents happen on purpose. I dont know what that means, though :(

But how the last line was smaller made the poem mean a whole lot more. It made it stand out.

Hey, get away! Get your purse away from me, ahhhhh!
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-07-23 19:44:34
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Seems like you both are travelling in the same boat. He can only revel in his feeling but you can even empathise with his feelings. This realisation of failure can pave the way to come over it.
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Posted by amyJo
2008-07-31 14:33:34
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really like it-so simple, yet really deep its great!
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-10 07:24:53
success

Who told chaabuck it was a fella.

This actually could be mother and child.

Perhaps needs another couple of lines for more clarity, but a touching poem nevertheless.

And do not be frightened or ashamed to post your picture on your profile. That silhouette makes you a nobody!

And you are not.

Kind regards

Harmattan.
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