I envisioned a 'goodbye,'

A worthy ending to what was once my only truth

Expectations dwindle with the branding you've left behind

Hearing your name carries me a million memories away

and it is a challenge to revert to the present

Here and now fails to thrill without you here

I anticipate everything that means nothing

It matters not

How I long for that high, that lift you tore away with you

The knowledge I have of what will surely come slowly leads me to insanity

Should you return, so then will the life that once thrived deep inside the shelter of my now hollow body.

Until then, love, I can only remember. 

Keyword: Lack of Closure

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Posted by allmine 2008-07-01 09:05:39 .... I she dead or just gone? I would make each line shorter and break it into stanzas, but that is just my personal opinion, which everyone's idea of poetry is different. Make sure you really protray how much you hurt that he is gone. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-01 12:50:38 .... I liked this. This was just an example of a more free-form poem. I thought you expressed your loss and lonliness very well. my favorite line(s): 'Hearing your name carries me a million memories away and it's challenging to revert to the present ' keep posting =] + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-01 20:44:44 .... well to simply say, this completely blew me away. i really loved everything you did here. i have to add this to my favorites :] + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-07-03 20:05:45 .... I liked the straight forward nature of this; often poetry gets so vague and abstract it can be hard to understand. This was an outpouring of raw emotions. + Report this comment

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