It wasn't her that lost faith, 'twas I.

Love she did, and in pain her face shone like a magnificent geM.

O'er mountains she seemed to glide, yet, where was I?

Vexed and confused, my belief shattered like broken glasS.

Enveloped by darkness, her God, somehow, I could not dismisS.

Yonder dismal abyss was my abode, while on the blessed Way she would faithfully staY. 

O God, you took her to your holy bosom, but LO,

Unto You be the glory, for as I looked inside her bureaU,

My astonished eyes beheld an answered prayer to a son penned by a dying moM.

Onto my knees, therefore, did I immediately gO,

Making me to realize, that I can praise her God in any storM!

Keyword: To Her Whom Cancer Took

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Posted by lemon 2008-06-30 18:23:06 .... Loved this! This was very unique and you did a GREAT job finding words that actually fit in with what you were saying rather than just finding words that started or ended with whatever letter you needed. wonderful! + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-06-30 20:06:15 Interesting This was interesting the way you had the sides. What was the one word suppose to be? Oh God, you took her to your holy bosom, but ?...anyway, good job. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-06-30 20:25:45 .... potter, i know i didnt write it lol, but it says 'LO' + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-06-30 20:36:30 .... So...LO..oh..didn't know + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-06-30 21:03:41 .... nice poem, really sad. i liked how the letters on the side sent a message. i think that it was suppose to be "but I OWE unto you" but to make it fit he spelt it I O. i could be wrong thougg + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-30 21:09:16 .... sad poem but really cool how you wrote it. although i dont know what lo means but I owe makes sense. Very Creative! + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-30 21:16:44 .... Okay, I changed the lo to LO for better understanding. The word can seem unclear, but at first I thought the two capital letters would throw off the others. However, the bold letters seem to keep the message. "LO" The American Heritage Dictionary defines this terms as-Used to attract attention to to show surprise. + Report this comment
Posted by bubbly 2008-06-30 21:37:10 incredible the verse is beautiful. the beginning and ending incredible. + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-30 21:40:45 .... On a personal note, the events of this poem are actual events. This month was the two year mark which inspired me to write these words. Cancer really is, no joke. + Report this comment
Posted by JJtyler 2008-06-30 22:35:00 Good poem. I just lost a brother-in-law to Mesothelioma. He had two young kids. Here's hoping for a cure in the near future. + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-30 22:51:38 .... Amen + Report this comment
Posted by flossy 2008-07-01 00:36:07 .... Did enjoy this.Very neatly written. + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-07-01 05:37:24 .... Pilgrim, this is beautiful. I am really impressed by this poem from a technical viewpoint, and really touched personally. My uncle died from Bowel cancer, I really dont think its possibe to describe how devestating it can be. Well done man, well done + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-01 08:11:50 .... To those who have had a love one die from cancer, it's never a pretty sight. I watched my mom wither away from brain cancer for two months, lying helpless on her bed. How could she keep smiling? How could she be thankful? I'll never truly understand unless I'm lying on that bed, yet, sometimes I am. + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-07-01 09:23:25 .... Oh how beautiful and poignant. I loved how you had the I Love You Mom on one side and the I Miss You Mom on the other. Makes it harder to find things that fit, but you did a great job. + Report this comment
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