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Rose Liquid


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Written by August Blackwood   
Monday, 30 June 2008
Image
Slash through
Air
And cut through
Bone
As soft flesh
And rose liquid
Seperate
Around the steel wedge.
Crying and screeching;
Echoes that shake the night
And make leaves whiten
And crinkle
Like an old widow's skin.
Eyes, the size of
Silver coins,
Burst open
And spill fluid
Out of young lettuce leaves.
Violins rot,
The wood decomposing
Along with its music,
The bow sliding ever so softly against
Rusty strings, sending
Salty red-orange particles to fly,
Only to be carried by fleas
That hide under the tail of a dead cow.
Rose liquid sinks deep
Into linen
That flaps from the stormy wind
That screams out your name.
Hollow faces dance in the leaves
That fall like white snow
Into a black swamp
That swallows light
Into its depths.
The leaves sink into
The dark surface
Like human teeth
Slipping back into their gums.
The long steel wedge strikes
Against the stone ground,
Rising back up into
Crunchy dead
Mush.
Dear Rose-red liquid,
Stick to that wedge.
 
Roses hook with their thorns
And never let go.

 



Copyright 2008 August Blackwood
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Comments (7)
Posted by Pilgrim
2008-06-30 14:10:32
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Hollow faces dance in the leaves that fall like white snow into a black swamp that swallows light into its depths- very good imagery. I liked it.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-06-30 15:06:46
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Superb imagery!!!! really liked this. felt as if everything was decaying. i liked the title as well. "Rose Liquid" that's a great title!
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Posted by lemon
2008-06-30 17:56:35
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This was a great poem. You did so well describing things. very, very nice. I think I'll actually add this to my favorites. =]
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-07-01 15:26:30
Wow!

That was awesome, very nice imagery and fantastic verve yer got goin' on here me girl.

Damn, that very cool, both beautiful and sinister.

Oh my, what a wicked pair. Hehe

Loved it!

Keep well,

'Anna
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Posted by indianaman130
2008-07-01 15:41:30
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You used orange, no one uses orange

that alone makes it great. No the imagery is spectacular with so few words i don't feel overwhelmed.
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Posted by bubbly
2008-07-02 19:24:41
descriptive!

hi! august.

there is vivid description in this poem, that adds charm to it. and the comparisons (like an old widow's skin) r incredible. good work. lol. ;-)
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-01 01:13:04
Beautiful

This poem is awesome for I liked the lines:

The wood decomposing

Along with its music,

The bow sliding ever so softly against Rusty strings

There is visual imagery tugging at heart strings.
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