Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-30 14:10:32 ....
     Hollow faces dance in the leaves that fall like white snow into a black swamp that swallows light into its depths- very good imagery. I liked it. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-30 15:06:46 ....
     Superb imagery!!!! really liked this. felt as if everything was decaying. i liked the title as well. "Rose Liquid" that's a great title! + Report this comment |  |
Posted by lemon 2008-06-30 17:56:35 ....
     This was a great poem. You did so well describing things. very, very nice. I think I'll actually add this to my favorites. =] + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-07-01 15:26:30 Wow!
     That was awesome, very nice imagery and fantastic verve yer got goin' on here me girl.
Damn, that very cool, both beautiful and sinister.
Oh my, what a wicked pair. Hehe
Loved it!
Keep well,
'Anna + Report this comment |  |
Posted by indianaman130 2008-07-01 15:41:30 ....
You used orange, no one uses orange
that alone makes it great. No the imagery is spectacular with so few words i don't feel overwhelmed. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by bubbly 2008-07-02 19:24:41 descriptive!
     hi! august.
there is vivid description in this poem, that adds charm to it. and the comparisons (like an old widow's skin) r incredible. good work. lol. ;-) + Report this comment |  |
Posted by chaabuk 2008-08-01 01:13:04 Beautiful
     This poem is awesome for I liked the lines:
The wood decomposing
Along with its music,
The bow sliding ever so softly against Rusty strings
There is visual imagery tugging at heart strings. + Report this comment |  |