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Written by Anna DeVine   
Sunday, 29 June 2008
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Scattered Stars

 

 

 

 


 
No more moments have been shared

Or futures ever planned

Since the day the man she loved

With loaded gun in hand

 

Woke her from a sleepy dream

To face her sudden death

And from the hate inside his heart

He stole her precious breath

 

Her death I know, was but a blink

And worthy taking note

But I prefer the memories

Of life our friendship wrote

 

Even though they're limited

I know they'll never fade

From Barbie dolls, to drunk in bars

Not one of them I'll trade

 

On time our mischief thrilled the day

The curtain called too soon

But scattered stars can orchestrate

When oceans wave in tune

 

For we've become Poetically

A reminiscent beat

So we can dream another day

Where sorrow's obsolete








Copyright 2008 Anna DeVine
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-06-29 02:33:04
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You know, i can leave a comment on this poem, i can fill up three comment boxes probably going on and on about this. but i'm not because i think you already know this is a kick ass poem.

As always.
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Posted by garyowen
2008-06-29 03:17:04
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That's it girl. You dunnit this time. I am going to give it all up and watch coronation street.

That last verse, I want someone to carve it on my headstone.

Brill.

'For we've become Poetically

A reminiscent beat

So we can dream another day

Where sorrow's obsolete'
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-06-29 04:44:59
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As allways, beautiful. *bows to the master*
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-06-29 06:20:04
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You and your excellent poetry submissions that put all my aspirations to shame. Just gotta keep showing off your talent don't you? Well how dare you madam. How dare you.
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-06-29 10:38:49
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Good job. Well written.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-06-29 12:04:03
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Any further comment is irrelevant - I liked it.

Phil
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Posted by flossy
2008-06-29 15:21:23
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Holy moly Sara.You got a fan here.I could be ure roady if you want.lol
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-06-29 15:27:29
Oh my...

I not ever have roady before.

Wow Flossy I not know what to say.

Err...

I think I say thank yer very much and yer have me word that I will look into a ample dental plan at least fer me new roady.

That cool, thanks again say nice comment on Poem I write fer me Jen.

Keep well,

'Anna
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-06-29 17:43:26
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well obviously everyone summed up what needs to be said about this great piece. but i really loved the last line "sorrow's obsolete" that was a very brilliant choice of words in my mind anyway. yea, i'm getting very sick of your pieces, Anna. because they just blow mine away. haha.
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Posted by parth13
2008-08-01 13:27:43
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But scattered stars can orchestrate

When oceans wave in tune

the most beautiful lines i've ever read...any comments in praise of this one will be too less...im ur FAN!!!
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Posted by The 13th
2008-08-01 13:32:05
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Second time reading this and just as beutiful.

Maybe thats the wrong word cause it's sad but your words...

Amazing.Have you thought about doin a book.

Regards 13.
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