Sam savored his sadistic story,

having happened to hate heaven over hell.

In isolation idiocy was idolized;

tempting talons to terroize his trances.

Often optioning to ogle over oracles,

devils dared to destroy his dreams.

Sam strived to sail the savage sea.

What wisdom, however, could withstand the waves?

To what total tis this tale?

Poor Sam's passion produced not piety but pity.

Keyword: A Dark Poetic Tale of Woe

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Posted by lemon 2008-06-28 23:47:32 .... I get what you are saying here, but I think the whole tongue twister thing makes it a difficult read lol. It might be cool if you could get it to flow easier. keep posting =] + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-29 02:27:13 .... I liked this.The use words starting with the same letters gave this an offbeat feel, that sounded unique. I like this line: What wisdom, however, could withstand the waves? + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-06-29 16:32:36 Nice Aye, while yer laconic verse here was a fun and whimsical read, aphoristically yer pen faltered not. Playful and succinctly Poetic I believe I'm rather fond of such a hat trick, it's clever and creative. Aye, that good stuff, that what I say. Keep well, 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-29 18:41:22 what i got was this guy was alone and liked it.. and then went sailing... or something.. and i think that even sounded better + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-13 19:34:32 .... This is good. I like poems like this that have the same letter throughout (there's a word for it, but shit if I can remember what it is). I think it takes talent to write a poem in such a manner and have it still make sense at the end. Well done. + Report this comment

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