Hello we've never met before

I'm really waiting for a friend 

Hey there man how did it go?

I saw you talking, who's that guy?

Yet I feel that I've known your

Leave me alone I can't pretend

**** that ***** she is a ho

Just some creep, you know he tried

Face in my dreams for quite sometime

I'm interested in sleazy slime 

I'll drink and have another try

To get me with a pickup line?

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Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-28 21:13:49 .... Didn't flow right. Especially in the middle. Maybe some grammatical reconstruction will help. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-28 21:16:25 .... okay i read this a couple times and i dont get it, but maybe thats what you want the reader to be: puzzled over a jigsaw? i dunno + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-06-28 21:21:27 .... genius! read the first line in the first stanza then the first in the second stanza then the third in the third stanza. ITs a jigsaw puzzle + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-28 21:26:01 .... Okay, that's better. Must be getting late. Look at the time. Can I play-off my ignorance? + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-06-28 22:09:44 .... interesting. I've got to admit I didn't get it until I read the comments and read ams's post. I don't know the only word that comes to mind is.. interesting lol =] + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-06-28 22:26:32 .... Oh wow. I never would've figured that out. Good work ams. This gets a five just for creativity! It really flows when you read it in the correct formation. I like it. + Report this comment
Posted by flossy 2008-06-29 01:04:57 .... Clever idea Dirk.Simple idea and I liked it.Good job + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-29 02:20:15 .... hee hee Im glad it worked out + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-06-29 03:00:51 Fookin Brill! LOL Oh my, yer be very clever here not to mention creatively cheeky. Aye Dirk, I'm gonna have to love this verse. Keep well, 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-06-29 19:52:27 found the last peice to the puzzle I think AMS deserves the genius tag for figuring this poem out. Dirkin deserves the (ill get you for this for hurting my brain) tag. Neat Idea to make us work around here. + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-29 19:57:15 .... Lol. If your brain hurts my aims are achieved hehehe + Report this comment
Posted by soulwriter 2008-06-30 03:55:30 .... Well done for writing a poem that tries to experiment with the whole concept of structure, without turning it into a pretentious mess, and being able to write a poem so good that it would have worked and been enjoyable even without the jigsaw structuring. + Report this comment
Posted by onyxdragon 2008-08-06 10:38:56 Missed this Not sure how I missed this one, but I'm so glad Ams answered it. I don't think I ever would have got it on my own. Nicely done, Dirk. Keep it up, you're good at these rhymes---yo. + Report this comment

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