I wake up everyday,

And they die a different way,

At first I think it is only a dream,

But then I hear their shrieking scream,

And I watch as they sink in the water,

Or the monsters come and offer up a slaughter,

Yesterday I was a superhero who had the power to fly,

But I didn't have the super strength to keep that nuke in the sky,

I try to save them in everyway I can,

But I'm not as fast as that death written minivan,

Everyday it is the same,

It isn't fair, I must be insane,

I have the gun to save them from the wicked beast,

I can see it running from the east,

But I know it's just a dirty trick,

When I pull the trigger and hear an empty click,

The tears hit the ground,

When I notice it isn't a dream and the bodies are still around,

Why can I only hear their screams?

Why is this devil so ******* mean?

I lay down with my family that are dead,

And when I have suffered beyond hours end,

The lights go out in my private cell,

And I await for the next day of my own personal Hell.

Keyword: i like purple spanish rice in the afternoon

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Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-27 09:12:43 .... good fucking poem!! i could feel all the anguish in this one. you should definitely write poems more often. + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-06-27 09:17:35 Ooh... Dark and moody head, at least yer own personal hell creates some pretty decent rhymes. Imagine if it didn't? See, it could always be worse. Hehe I love it Max, yer a natural, this un flowed wonderfully. Quite the hellish verse indeed. Keep well in hell, and remember... It's personal. (Whatever the hell that means, once again, I not know, but I think you do...) 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-27 09:21:58 .... Thanks Anna and Cody for reading my Poem. Yeah, i know what it means ... or do I? AHHHHHH! + Report this comment
Posted by Behind_the_Mask 2008-06-27 12:44:34 ... Hmm when I read this I thought of fluffy bunnies and for some reason that made me think of flying super radioactive bunnies, which ended up taking over the world. I look forward to reading more of your work, as many authors do not touch the darker side, but you live in it, which would not be the dark side for you but normal, well before I start confusing myself let me say, I enjoyed this poem, keep up the great work. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-27 13:49:24 .... Super Radioactive Bunny VIllians, huh? you should write a story about that, i think it'd be funny. Heheh I dont think anyone has ever said that about me. Thank you. + Report this comment
Posted by Behind_the_Mask 2008-06-27 14:03:32 ... Oh yes I shall, it shall be an epic story that shall be remembered through the ages as the story that changed out minds on the power of the bunnies. Well it’ll be remembered as long as I keep it in my brain. + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-27 14:21:14 .... A this poem was sick and it had a even dark tone. Nice job. I might try and dabble in a super hero poem but a light side. Maybe. YEAH + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-06-27 19:55:54 .... Interesting in a morbid kind of way. One contradiction, the devil seems to control an aspect of his mind, yet the character has his own personal Hell. Is the character the devil? + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-27 20:01:12 That, my friend, is for the reader to decide + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-06-27 23:49:02 .... I think you meant to say 'death RIDDEN minivan.' But besides that good poem. I don't really read poetry so I'll just say that I liked it because of the dark material. Good job. Off the subject I'm at work and Home Movies just came on adult swim. So.....awesome. Boot! + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-27 23:51:54 .... hahah i'm watching that right now! that oblongs that was just on a little while go was hilarious. Oh, yeah it was what i meant to put, hmm.. i guess i better go change it before i wake up to a new day... + Report this comment
Posted by D.A. Ross 2008-06-28 22:08:18 ty You Rock, zombie !! keep it up + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-30 09:53:06 .... An interesting tale told in poetry form. I kept picturing a superhero that didnt save the day for some reason. Maybe because there's a lot of Hancock trailers on TV right now. Your rhythm was pretty good here. I liked the font and layout too + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-07-01 09:21:17 .... I actually liked this. I read it with me breath held cause I wasn't sure what to expect. But it was good. A story about not being able to save the one's he loves. Great Job! + Report this comment
Posted by sean2euro 2008-07-01 10:00:58 .... this really blew me away. i love the voice of the narrator; i thought it was very melancholy but still quietly passionate. well done man! i look forward to reading more of your work p.s. that's a great title, that's what made me click on to it + Report this comment
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