Posted by lemon
2008-06-26 11:48:02
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Well done. I liked the way you separated the dream from reality with one simple word 'Crash'. I thought the format really contributed to the poem too, because when you're describing dreams, the text seems to float off of the page, then after 'Crash' everything starts to go back to the norm. Wonderful Job! =]
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Posted by indianaman130
2008-06-26 13:16:28
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what lemon said. If you like open poem forms, check out E. E. Cummings. You would like his style, or lack thereof.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-06-26 13:42:59
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yes, this one i enjoyed. really liked how you made this appear. and i loved how you described the both extremes of life. very good.
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-06-26 17:57:43
hmm
This was a nice poem about how life can change from happiness and hope to bitter hate and demise. n n nj
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-06-27 22:57:58
I love it!
Very beautiful stream of yer imagination.
Creative and Poetically graceful, this felt juss so natural to read.
Juss the way yer cared enough to put a little extra time and effort into yer structure alone speaks volumes fer yer character's love fer the Poetic arts, and perhaps is somewhat telling of a creative mind striving fer individualism.
Talent...
Y'gots it
Aye, this little gem here was a jolly fine read indeed.
Lovely Poetry
Keep well,
'Anna
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-06-28 21:34:52
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This was very creative poetry, and not very easy to write. I like it.
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Posted by Kasi elaborated
2008-07-28 11:41:22
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I too, liked it. Your form is visually pleasing and adds dimension to the piece.
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