Not Even A Million Tears

She's gone and pulled the trigger on my open heart

And in this disgrace for a world I still haven't gotten very far

Deep within myself, the pieces can't be arranged

Not even a million tears could wash away the pain

Feeling distant from everyone and every single thing

I'm waiting for the end, but never knew of my beginning

And as a human being, I'm so lost and scarred

As time goes on my feelings get even more bizarre

Telling night from day has never been this hard

Pulling pieces from my face, until it just falls apart

I'm so scared of what this future might hold

I'm scared I might just freeze if I stay here in the cold

But I can hear your hopeful words, they go into my ear

But with this deranged mind, I can't let go of my fear

And no, not even a million tears could wash away this pain

Wake up to sunshine, but I can only see the rain

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Posted by lemon 2008-06-24 19:12:19 .... I definitely felt the pain that your poem expressed, but I had a difficult time finding a rhythm when I read it. Great otherwise though =] + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-06-24 20:35:15 so so Not really sure what your going for here. Like Lemon said, it really didn't have a good flow like a poem should have. I thought your last two lines were the best part of this poem. That probably didn't sound like a compliment, but it was. + Report this comment
Posted by CliffMitchell 2008-06-24 23:39:56 .... I thought it was great. Poetry doesn't always need flow, just a genuine feeling and you exposed it truthfully. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-25 14:04:13 .... well it's not really that hard to understand.... it's just about depression. but thanks for the comments anyway. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-25 16:26:41 .... It didnt really rhyme all too well, but I dont think all poems neccesary has to rhyme. I liked the passion in this poem, and especially the last two lines. Great Work. + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-26 18:45:45 .... hmmm.. hmm...... + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-26 19:17:22 .... what kind of comment was that amatayo???? listen, if you don't feel like leaving anything that makes sense then don't leave anything at all. it's pretty simple. + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-04 17:40:39 .... Good description of negativity. I don't think that scarred and bizarre go well together. Also, near the end, a reptition of scared threw me off. Maybe terrified would be better? + Report this comment

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