Fair thee well my love my Ashokan mistress

My homeland is calling for me to return

I have tasted your fruit drank from your water

Your memory forever is etched in my heart

And of me should you think then think of me fondly

For nothing but joy am I thinking of thee

Though an ocean apart our love may be kindled

By the stars that shine bright in the clear northern sky

Fair thee well to the land friends and companions

Erin is calling me home

You have taken my heart it's yours forever

My soul shall not rest till my body is home

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Posted by Hodders 2008-06-22 06:25:27 .... I liked it, great emotions conveyed here. + Report this comment
Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe 2008-06-22 07:45:57 good Very well constructed poem. Not all poems need to rhyme...did i spell that right. Anyway, There are a couple things I will critique about this piece. Firstly, the phrase on the 3rd line makes no sense..(I drank from your water)..say what? Secondly, Although (I) believe you're speaking of a country, I can't be sure...what or who is Erin? But over all, good poem. My opinion... Your third line should be... I have tasted your fruit and bathed in your water...sounds good to me... but its your poem. + Report this comment
Posted by garyowen 2008-06-22 15:18:49 .... Ashokan is a town in NY State that was flooded for a dam. Erin is old name for Ireland, the fruit and water mentioned are the gift from the land -Askokan- + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-22 19:23:13 Hmm I really didn't understand the poem until your comment but really when the poem is well constructed you would not need to say what the poem is talking about because the poem already said it. + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-04 18:10:10 .... Didn't quiet keep my attention. Seems to me the word, think, was used in a repetetive way. Repetition usually throws me for a loop. + Report this comment
Posted by harmattan 2008-08-10 06:40:28 Farewell What is it about Erin that makes her call back more of her departed sons than any other country. I'm with the Lee Marvin character in Paint Your Waggon "Home is made for coming from And dreams of going to Which with any luck Will never come true". The last line should have started with "But". Apart from that, interesting work and a pleasure to read. Kind regards harmattan + Report this comment

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