With Hands Folded

We stood on that cliff, you and me

Just taking in all of the beautiful scenery

In eachothers lies we both conceived

But now that cliff is lost in time

Buried under the dirt and grime

Without it, I've lost my mind

Lately, I've been looking into space

I'm finding everything there to be fake

What is there left that you didn't take

Now looking back on what is done

I realize from you, I should have run

But how was I to know, from you the damage would come

Is there a place I can rest my head

A place to be happy instead of upset

A place where the walls aren't drenched with regret

With hands folded I give my faith to the stars of the night

They give me hope when it's out of sight

Loosening this noose when it gets too tight

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Posted by Writer Extrodinaire 2008-06-21 19:41:51 Umm..... i thought it was good i loved the end "loosening the noose when it gets too tight" + Report this comment
Posted by garyowen 2008-06-23 03:14:31 .... This poem dug up all kinds of feelings for me. I think the fourth verse was the strongest: Now looking back on what is done I realize from you, I should have run But how was I to know, from you the damage would come.' + Report this comment
Posted by garyowen 2008-06-23 03:20:23 .... They say hindsight is a wonderful thing, but sometimes it can be a knife twisting in an old wound. Great poem + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-25 00:43:57 .... This is pretty good. I hope when you say : concieve you dont mean shes pregnant! + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-06-25 17:26:16 .... Your poems almost always make me feel whatever emotion is being described. my favorite line is the last one. Great job! =] + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-04 18:35:45 .... I liked the three-stanza ryhming; I'm uncertain what this is called, yet, I enjoyed it. + Report this comment

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