I left the class and walked to second

Another day I said I was going to make my move

I see her and I think to myself what was I thinking 

I have no chance

Then I see her smiling and joking with me she goes into

her class and I think maybe I do...

I come out of class and she walks right by me without a word 

She walks into homeroom and glances at me from time to 

time and when I talk to her she stops everything to reply

Then after school I struggle to say goodbye and she walks up 

and hugs me I don't what to think then I come to 

school the next day and she walks right past me

And it starts all over again

Keyword: Mind Reader

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Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-19 23:49:32 Umm..... I kind of did not understand what the poem was about but what do I know. Maybe you can explain it. But over all it was okay and I see that this is a series so maybe as it goes on it will reveal it's self later so I guess I will look forward to the next post. + Report this comment
Posted by slavetolove 2008-06-20 00:00:38 Will You Get Her well if anyone has ever gone through it theres a girl you like and you dont know what shes thinking and the way she acts changes so you never know were you are with her....for a guy that has a poem about love i would think you know but maybe not....but i see that your comparing my writing style to yours and we are different....i would rather hear criticism from a goo writer like zombie punk. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:02:13 .... Oi! Whats that supposed to mean, huh? + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:24:35 Wow Well when I first posted against your comment I was really being nice but if you want to come at me and my writing style then come blazing with a better poem because from what I read it was a really bad job and a poor excuses for anything. And I guess you where trying to say a good writer like Zombie Punk but if you look at his profile you would see that he writes horror and adventure not poetry. So before you go and try to shoot on some ones work look them up and understand that your not among us poets but some one who thinks to high of them self " SO UNDERSTAND, STEP BACK, CAUSE YOUR POEM IS WHACK" + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:30:24 .... Oh, it was a compliment? cool. Amatayo, you make me laugh hey! i write humor too... + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:33:28 What what exactly is that suppose to mean "Amatayo you make me laugh" let me know. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:35:42 .... So understand, step back, cause your poem is whack" it made me ... um, laugh. I remember some asshole made rude comment on one of your oems before and you came back with a humorous comment making fun of him. so you make me laugh. savvy? + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:41:53 Okay Well thanks I remember him too he was bamjedi. I am still waiting for his next post because he never finished his series. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:44:06 .... The Tomatoes are spoiled so no more ketchup + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:47:53 Naw No more ketchup then what will eat with my hash browns and I also just bought some yesterday what is that bad to? + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:49:37 Sucks Is it just me or does this 24 hour rule suck I can't wait to post my next two poems. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:53:14 .... TO answer first question-it wasnt ketchup you bought, it was the blood of a Moose To answer second question-no, i think it good idea. that way other stories get to stay on main page longer. while you wait maybe you should give them another look and make your poem even better than is? + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:55:54 Well then Well that blood of a mouse taste good to me. I might just have to cut out the middle man and milk my own mice. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-20 00:58:19 .... The Blood of a Human Tastes Better + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-20 00:59:57 Maybe Well maybe but I am on a diet. + Report this comment
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