Flowers roam through the long

Corridors of cognizant sentiment.

I attempt to grasp them

As each one slips away

Like cleansing bars of soap.

The search for happiness

That long blinds mankind,

Is only a false mirror of exigent desires.

Strive

For those with which

Neither excites nor depresses.

Strive

For which quietude results.

The constant path

Of magical mirages.

Walk through its opaque walls.

And melt into the freeing

Foreign atmosphere.

Keyword: Strive

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Posted by Amatayo 2008-06-19 16:32:04 What I Think I kinda understand what you where getting at but then again I have no idea what this is about. But I did like how you used metaphors. How the slipping of the flower petals are as the way wet soap slips away. + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-19 17:23:09 alright youre the boss + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-19 17:32:52 .... yes, i really enjoyed the metaphors in this. i thought you did a good job. + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-06-26 03:10:45 Oh my August, this left me breathless. What an amazing verse, it read like a conceptual flickering of the reminiscent heart. Very, very cool Poetic effect, I so impressed. Aye, yer in the Zone, that very cool place to find yerself. Poetically or otherwise... Exquisite verse, I love it. 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-26 04:46:48 .... This was very tripped out. I honestly don't get the message, but it was beautifully written and delivered + Report this comment
Posted by soulwriter 2008-06-26 06:23:49 .... Seeking the quietude of not having any illusions about that which excites or depresses, is the way to real freedom? Not too sure I agree with that, but this is a beautifully expressed poem. Well done, well done. + Report this comment
Posted by chaabuk 2008-08-01 01:22:40 .... This reads like an inspirational poem. To make progress in life, you give an example of a flower, which is delicate yet tenacious. Probably this is the quality we should be striving for. Thoughtful. + Report this comment

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