Posted by ams
2008-06-15 22:15:19
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it seems strange to me that you tell someone that their poem isnt a good as in your words "rhymer" and your poem doesnt rhyme at all. just something to think about.
i dont really get the last line. the impression that i got was that it was your idea of comedy because you dont believe in true love and you think that this girl is like on drugs or something. but poetry's not really my thing so i dont really know. i was hoping that you could clarify it a little for me.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-06-15 23:46:22
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exactly how is this a poem????????
wow, i'm dissapointed. for the comments you post, i thought your work would be brilliant....but as far as i can see, it's nothing far from worthless.
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Posted by nick711
2008-06-20 09:10:33
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Wow. I'm starting to think there is little hope in the poetry world for Brent. But, as you seem to be doing, keep trying with different things, but next time put a little more effort into the way it flows, and the rhyme scheme. Generally most of my own poems do not have a set rhyme scheme but it can help the flow alot. Don't let all these comments get to you, everybody has potential to be a great poet.
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Posted by Kasi
2008-06-25 19:15:50
My First & Second Impression
When I started reading this I thought... Halmark card... Then at the end I felt... Life Time Movie Network Feature.. I think you should develop it more, especially the ending; and try not to write in all caps- I felt like you were screaming at me.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-07-23 21:02:22
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This is indeed thoughtful. You are waiting for true love and it knocks on your doos but you fail to recognise it. Whose misfortune should it be. For true love is never a risk.
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