Her Magic Touch, Chapter 4

After a while, Don finds his composure and says,...

It's a Matter of Importance

The two of them stood there, neither one of them...

The deer's have eye'z, Chapter 2


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Written by ~Fletcher~   
Sunday, 15 June 2008

Waring bad grammar.

 

 

The next day the police had found the body, put up that police tape, and informed the young mans parents that he had been drinking that night.

The wooden spike was still in the young mans body when they found him...

But they found no fingerprints. The police were very confused no finger prints, but the murder weapon was left, and hoof prints leading until it reached where a rock slide had happened near bye.

 

Most likely they thought that the killer had worn gloves (duh) but was he on a horse? No those are deer hoof prints. The deer might have been around after the death, but how did the killer not leave foot prints? This area was very muddy...

 

It was a pickle all right but they told the parents that they had it all under control. (Police always say that it's like they're motto)  There was one detective working on this case,

His name is Sanjaya Bottner a young fresh detective who had been through many dead end jobs leading up to this one.

 

What is going on here? Sanjaya thought to himself.

 

But Sanjaya didn't know that far off from the crime scene his question was being answered...

 

"Was the first strike a success lord Bambi?"  Asked the male deer guard to Bambi's room "Yes a great success! The human scum expect nothing"

 

The deer are plotting to destroy all mankind here we are in they're base.

But now a I am tired and this is where I drop off for now.



Copyright 2008 ~Fletcher~
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Comments (12)
Posted by JJtyler
2008-06-15 18:05:55
Ha

Your first line says you were "warring" bad grammar. I thought you must be on a mission.

But then I realized it meant warning.

I'm not sure where you are going with this, if it is meant to be funny or serious. And now I will stop commenting because I'm tired.
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-15 18:12:35
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It's total stupidity not to be taken seriously.

Yeah i used spellcheck on every part of this story but i put in the warning after i pasted onto this page.
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Posted by Xena
2008-06-15 18:13:22
Fletcher

you son of a bee we all know youre doing that on purpose... you know when you enter the 4th grade the teachers wont tolerate that kind of spelling.. no im kidding but seriously really.. they wouldnt
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-15 18:39:00
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Yep! Thats why im homeschooled. No really im gonna working on my grammar and spelling.
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-15 18:42:23
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going to start* read over before you post fletcher!!! *beats self* read over!!!
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Posted by novel.idea
2008-06-15 18:44:01
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I hope that you know that there are no such things as deer's or eye'z.
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Posted by Flossy
2008-06-16 06:10:23
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There is one thing in this life that pisses me off.When you give some-one honest advice and they ignore you.Will not comment again.
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-06-16 08:00:02
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You're homeschooled? Yay! I was, too!

Xena - if you hate this story, don't read it! Simple and clear.
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Posted by D.A. Ross
2008-06-19 18:40:50
Why even post

One of the first things you quickly learn as an aspiring writer is to not publish anything that is not the best it can be. After all it is a representation of you, and your work. This is storiesville, not some crap I rushed together and didn't care about.com

Thanks for annoying me.
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-23 19:46:46
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Yes!!! I scucced!!! I annoyed people!
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-06-23 20:34:23
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You should be very proud.
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-24 17:13:36
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Thank you i iz.
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