A young man was walking home from a party...

yes he was drunk (Totaly wasted)

he was walking home for he had just wrecked his car.

Walking walking walking...

gigling as he went on

(he's drunk duh)

he was walking through some woods,

he's far from where his car wrecked,

and there is some thing in the woods watching him....

stalking him

with large yellow eyes

mumbling to himself

cursing,

stumbling,

getting back up,

and throwing up...

the yellowed eyed beast

stalking him carefully and slowly...

waiting...

Now!!!!

and with a swift hoof the creature came from his shadow and struck the young man...

right in the heart

and giant wooden spike

the young man screamed at the sight of the blood

the creature tore his left arm off....

the drunkie screamed even more

he saw he this was....

a deer and before he could even say anything...

the deer impaled him with his horns

the drunkie died...

and so there...

Bambi luaghed

he luaghed and luaghed

then Bambi said

"Let the war begin! MEN WILL PAY FOR WHAT THEY DID TO MY MOTHER!!!!!!"

(In case you didnt catch that... this story is about bambi from the disney movie "Bambi" and he has made any army of deer ready to destroy all of the humans... all in revenge for his mother and other killed deer)

x.0 Ha ha ha

Keyword: The deer's have eyez (Poorly written grammar story)

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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10 2008-06-14 16:52:39 .... Lol my friend Evan and i made this up. + Report this comment
Posted by E.Dover 2008-06-14 18:35:26 .... I made that up? + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-14 19:30:45 Okay ... Some weird stuff, man. I dont know whether to laugh or shift eyes back and forth. It wsa annoying about how big of spaces the paragraphs were in. You should run a spell check before submitting, by the way. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-14 19:31:40 Ah shit... "wsa" should be "was" my bad... + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-14 19:33:46 zombie punk you spelled was wrong... + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-14 19:34:46 oh and i forgot to add that you are a dumbass for it my bad... + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-14 19:36:08 xena you're a worthless bitch that has no brains. my bad... + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-14 19:37:10 oh and it should be "spelling" not "spelled" + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-14 19:44:48 ay mr zombie punk i think you need a back massage.. or some type of good rubdown + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-14 19:47:51 Ms. Xena It wont help you get any smarts, I guess you were born a retard, huh? + Report this comment
Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe 2008-06-15 07:22:25 .... Whats the point to this, in all seriousness. Also, why do you write with such bad grammar? Its played out. Its just not funny anymore. The fact that you submitted this and probally knocked out a story on the home page from an author who at least tries...pisses me off. + Report this comment
Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10 2008-06-15 12:26:40 .... Honstley i dont give a crap what any of you say. And Xena shut up please your just a annoying. Oh also im going to start doing spell check before i do any more stories. + Report this comment
Posted by Xena 2008-06-15 18:04:33 zombie do you need hug and a kiss? you too fletcher.. we can have a three way kiss! + Report this comment
Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10 2008-06-15 18:10:21 .... ... + Report this comment
Posted by Flossy 2008-06-16 01:15:35 .... You should thank Xena.She has put this badly written ditty in the most comments folder for you.I think xena has a soft spot for ya fletch.One peice of advice re write this.Its Just terrible. + Report this comment
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