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A peom 12th (HA!!! My first romace peom thingy!!)


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Written by ~Fletcher~   
Friday, 13 June 2008

this a peom romance story thingy >.>

 

 

 

 

There was a young man

 

he was different

 

he was basicly a loser

 

and he knew it

 

 

 

he did know God loved him

 

but he struggled with that

 

he cared about his image

 

he cared more what others thought

 

more than what God thought

 

 

 

and so he tried and tried and tried to fit in

 

some liked him

 

most thought he was strange

 

this young man

 

liked a girl

 

however she did not feel the same

 

so she rudley and harshly let him know

 (*emo tear*)

 

 

 

 

this young man

 

feeling down and low as scum

 

he sucked it up

 

and moved on

 

going through the same things

 

caring more on image

 

and not very much caring for the Lord

 

 

 

then he met onther girl

 

however... again she did not like him

 

but she was much nicer about this

 

and let him down easy

 

and then they because friends

 

so the young man moved on...

 

But

 

 

 

 

 

 

he and God finaly got things strait. With help from close friends

 

finaly he was better

 

out of his depression

 

no more thoughts to kill

 

he now had many friends

 

his life was going well

 (As well as his life could go)

 

 

 

 

 

 

then...

 

one of his friends who was his friend from the beginning

 

liked this young man

 

he had liked her too but was to shy to tell

 

things seem better than ever...

 

 

and from now my friends

 

the rest is still to be writen

 

 

 

 

 

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Copyright 2008 ~Fletcher~
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Comments (14)
Posted by E.Dover
2008-06-13 17:02:25
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What a great ending! =D
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-13 17:11:51
yay

thanks
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Posted by rtvols344
2008-06-13 18:22:50
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That wasn't me was it? That wasn't me you were talking about was it? OMW I'm so sorry fletcher!!!
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Posted by Xena
2008-06-13 21:06:11
huh

so some gay guy liked the other guy but was too shy to say anything? and.. god didnt like him cause he was gay? i cant say i like your first romance poem thingy dingy very much.. *emo tear*
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-06-13 21:30:35
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I dont think Xena read it properly... It didnt say anything about gay guys as far as I could see. Well I think this was a nice story, but this could have been rearranged and read as a small paragraph and you wouldnt know it was a poem. try putting some rhythm or rhyme in there.
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-14 15:56:56
?!@?!??!?!?!?!?

WHAT RYBON?!?!!? I never liked you??1!? Your just my friend!
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-14 16:00:27
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oops Robyn*
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Posted by novel.idea
2008-06-15 18:55:12
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I never thought that you were a loser.

What's romace?
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-15 18:57:03
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honestly i dont know
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Posted by ThatPsycoArtistFletcher10
2008-06-15 18:57:45
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i just dont read things before i post them *beats self* yeah im a tard.
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Posted by novel.idea
2008-06-16 08:00:38
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Tard is definitley not a word.
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Posted by topsyturvywords
2008-06-17 11:14:12
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nice one.indeed very short but the mystery of what's going to happen next is a real mystery.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-06-20 03:40:40
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It was alright, found my attention going a bit near the end though.
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-06-20 13:38:08
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I liked it. Reminds me a lot of what I went through in my twenties. Thank you for writing that.
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