I came home early, with flowers in my hand.

I went to the bedroom,she was with another man.

I dropped the flowers, They scattered on the floor.

I went to the closet and grabbed my forty four.

Thumb cocked that pistol,put it to her head.

I squezzed the trigger, I knew the ***** was dead.

The man started running, he was heading for his knife.

With one more shot from my gun, I ended his life.

somebody called the police. They hauled my ass away.

Her blood still on my hands what else could I say.

I gave my confession, I would soon pay for my sins.

I knew of two dead body's that wouldn't hurt me again.

I stood up in the courtroom, as they read my guilty plea.

The system is going to make an example out of me.

I felt the needle go in my arm, as I watched my mother cry.

Soon we would be side by side,but first I had to die.

I made my peace with God today, I took it like a man.

I went threw those perly gates with flower's in my hand.

Keyword: "FLOWER"S"

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Posted by June Eclipsis 2008-06-04 08:50:34 Extraordinary I don't believe I have seen a more unique poem for over a year. I especially loved the line, "I knew of two dead bodies that wouldn't hurt me again. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-06-04 14:39:16 .... Great! This was really good! (for someone of your age..HAHA! had to throw that in there) This was really good work though, I liked the end stanza: I made my peace with God today, I took it like a man. I went through those pearly gates with flowers in my hand. GREAT! + Report this comment
Posted by colemoriss 2008-06-04 16:47:38 .... WOW, THAT WAS SO DEEP, AND... WELL... WOW! + Report this comment
Posted by alfred 2008-06-04 16:51:56 .... Not sure about this one, the jury is still out. Rather simple rhyming I will say. Not sure what you meant with the 2nd to last verse about his mother and him. Oh well,,rock on + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-06-04 19:39:47 .... yes, great poem. i loved every line. felt as though it was a nice raw piece that was conveyed so well. + Report this comment
Posted by Kasi 2008-06-05 11:07:28 .... wow. + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-06-06 09:18:50 Chilling To say the very least. Spelling is an issue, but I am a perfectionist when it comes to that, so don't think too much about it. Very very chilling.... + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-06 09:24:32 .... nice one, man. this was a fun, gripping, short poem although you really need to fix spelling + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-06 09:26:15 .... nice one, man. a short, gripping, well done poem although you need to fix spelling + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-06-06 09:33:01 .... reason i posted 2 was cuz i didnt think first one went through all the way oopps + Report this comment
Posted by indianaman130 2008-06-08 13:57:35 .... Short emotional piece, gripping. sometimes short and simple is the best. + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-06-08 20:49:53 .... Simply written, but a dramatic tale. I wonder if he would get through the gates after murdering someone... + Report this comment
Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe 2008-06-08 21:30:39 .... Honey, its not want it looks like...eh, a couple misspelled words, nothing to bad. Just have a question. Who called the police? strange line in your poem. + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-06-11 17:37:11 .... I also take issue with your spelling. Misspelled words catch the reader's eye easily, and disrupts the flow of the poem or story. However, that was a really good poem. I wish there were more rough and raw poems like this one on this site. Good job! + Report this comment
Posted by jnfish 2008-06-11 22:46:22 .... Pretty good poem. Hope this was not your true life experience. Might want to think twice about pulling the trigger.....is she really worth it? Good job. + Report this comment
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