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Written by Anna DeVine   
Tuesday, 03 June 2008
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On Word 





The world is a factory, full of machines
Each replaced by a newer generation
I'm a robot, metal shell full of clockwork
But really I am a breath, dying inside

And as the gears continue to turn onward
An intricate jigsaw of moving parts
The clockwork ticks and time fades away
And I'm nothing more then a slipping echo

Smoke floats high from the tall chimneys
It captures my imagination, a dreamer myself
One 'man's' trash can be a real man's treasure
All I have are these dreams, these dying hopes

I'm nothing more then a waking scream, weak
When I'm gone I'll be replaced by a new model
A memory lapse, scattered with the fated sands
I'll shift along with all the other broken pieces




Of this tired universe






Copyright 2008 Anna DeVine
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Comments (9)
Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-06-03 18:53:57
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very good. i liked how you described the person as a machine. i really enjoyed this.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-06-03 23:58:07
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i cant think of any words to describe this poem for i am really tired. but i do really like it! great job

off to bed for me...
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-06-04 06:16:58
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It would be nice to think we leave more of a lasting mark on the world, but sadly this is not often the case, except perhaps through the memories of our friends and family. Or Poetry! I hope I interpreted this right. Well done
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-06-04 13:25:09
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Metamorphoses unfolding beautifully, Anna.You go to the depth of things.
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Posted by Kasi
2008-06-05 11:11:08
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Great poem. It has a sad essence, I liked it.
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Posted by alfred
2008-06-05 13:22:22
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Is the title a mistake 'on word' I see where you have the correct spelling in the poem. Just curious, maybe you meant it like that.... good poem.
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-06-06 01:06:55
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I meant to write 'On Word' such as I did in the title.

Thanks fer the inquiry and the review.

'Anna
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Posted by Egoist
2008-06-10 09:59:17
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I can't get over how deep your poetry is Anna. You display such grace and beauty in every line. Antipersonification, is that what it would be called? I call it perfect.
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Posted by flowerclover
2008-06-10 20:46:04
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Love it. depressing yet descriptive at the same time. Great!
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