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Written by Charles   
Sunday, 01 June 2008

As sky and tina head off to bed, the thugs have just arrived in the small town of valley.alabama.

They stopped at a days inn right off the exit, it wasn't the hilton but it was a place to sleep. Two of the thugs

went to find something to eat. The other thug prepared himself for the dreaded phone call to Al.

He picked up the phone dialed the number and waited for Al's instruction's. The phone rang three times

then an angry voice answered.

"what took you ******* clown's so long to call me."

"we called as soon as we got here like you said boss"

"my grandmother drive's faster than that and she's dead."

"sorry boss wont happen again"

"It better not! I would hate to bring your death squad down to two members, but anyway listen up go to

a pawn shop in town called [Larry's wholesale]. He will set you up with a police scanner. Im sure whoever

killed toby didn't have time to burie the body to deep in the ground, and as hot as it is in alabama this time of year,the body will turn up soon."

"What do you mean by that Boss"

"you dick head, when the body begins to stink it will attract unwanted animal's, that will start digging him

up and sazamm body found."

"Make's since now boss, That's way your number two."

"shut up! Id like to take a number two down your ******* neck you piece of ****. Just do what I tell you

and don't speak ,and one of you clown's better be listening to that scanner at all times. Are my orders clear"

" Yes sir boss!

that's the last the thug heard before the phone went silent. The thug waited for his bubby'S to get back to give them al's instruction's Two hours went by and nothing. his eye's soon got to heavy to stay awake and he fell asleep.About four hours later the two remaining thugs came back from the local waffel house.went over to the thug that was sleeping and said.

"Wake up!"

The sleeping thug woke up with fire in his eye's drew his gun.

"where in the hell have you two been"

"wooow! little buddy. What the dirty harry bullshit all bout."

"The boss is pissed! He said if we didn't follow his instruction to the tee were all as good as dead"

"ok! ok! whats he want us to do"

"Go to a pawn shop in town pick up a police scanner and wait for news of toby's death"

"Thats bullshit that will take forever, and what if they don't find him."

"Then welcome to Valley alabama our new home."

" **** that ****"

"Ok ill tell al you don't want the job then."

"bullshit! Im not ready to die yet, but when we do find this tina im punching her damn light out for putting us threw this ****"

" I sure wished I knew what she knew that made her so damn important."

"enough! let's just go to bed, and worry about this **** tommorrow."

 

The three thugs didn't sleep well that night. this whole job seemed like bullshit to them. the thing that

keep them tossing, and turning is this one name. The name that has haunting them since the begining

and even gotten one of them killed.{TINA}. The next morning the thugs got up, went to town to get some breakfast, fill up with gas, and headed for Larry's Wholesale to pick up the scanner.

"hello!are you Larry!"

"Why yes I am who's asking?"

"Al sent us to pick up a scanner."

"I've been waiting on you guy's! here you go and al said to give you this"

He handed them a envelope with ten thousand dollars in it, and a metal box full of gadet's.

There were homming devices, phone tapping equipment, and three small 22. cal. pistols.

"What's all this **** for."

The money is for expences,and the rest is to gather infromation with."

"what about these small ass pistols"

"your to gather info! not kill anyone, by the way the boss said for you to give me your weapons"

"are you out of your ******* mind"

"I could call the boss and you can disguss it with him"

"that's allright! here take them.
"don't worry you'll get them back when the job is done."

 

The three thugs grabed the gear and went back to the hotel set the scanner up and waited, and waited,and waited. For about four weeks they waited. Then the break they had been waiting on. The police scanner rang out that a man had been found dead outside a metal factory. Aparrently some dog's were eating on the remains and someone reported it to the police. The thug's got there hopes up ,but couldn't be sure it was

Toby's body" One of the thugs picked up the phone and called al.

 

"hello"

" Boss they have found a body near a metal factory, but were not sure it's toby or not"

"Good! keep listening to the scanner for more infromation, and start watching the evening new's sooner are later they will identfy his body and report it. Thats the one thing you can count on, the news people can't

keep there mouth's shut about anything."

"Yes sir boss"
"one more thing! don't **** this up! and if a hair on tina's head in out of place your all dead! under stand"

"yes sir"

Sure enough Al was right again! About a week later they had identifyed the body as that of toby Gibes The nortious drug dealer.

after all the waiting they finaly had a lead they could work with. For the first time since they had been in

this god forsaken town sleep came easy that night. Tomorrow they could start on there own investigation.

and get the answer's they needed to get out of this town.

 

 

{The thugs finnaly catch a break, and are one step closer to tina. Sky has been learning to be street smart from Joe, and al eagerly awaits the phone call that will put his mind to ease. where's tina!}

 



Copyright 2008 Charles
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Comments (4)
Posted by skyshark
2008-06-01 10:41:33
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good job, but please for the sake of sanity, ask for grammar help!
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Posted by lemon
2008-06-01 14:52:30
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The story is a lot easier to follow with the new format! Good job, just remember to run the spellcheck and grammarcheck in your word processor. :)
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Posted by pyrohottie57
2008-06-13 13:29:38
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I like your stories, they are keeping me interested. Something you need to learn is that when characters have names and stuff about them, then your readers are going to want to learn more about them hence them reading more of your stories. So for the thugs give them names. Like alot of your other postings you need to spell check and use correct formatting that will make your stories all the better...

but other then that, Great job...
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-07 11:45:12
Much Better

A lot easier to read. I can now see where the bad language really is.

Still don't like it, and will not rate the story as highly as it probably deserves.

Watch your use of capitals (crazy aren't I?) - they DO have a place when using places names, peoples' names, the starting of sentences.

Moving on again.

Phil
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