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The Reaper
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Written by Alex Hodson   
Friday, 30 May 2008
ImageThe Reaper's boots trampled the road,
His black cloak behind him magically flowed
In the breeze like a dark angel's wings,
Upon his hand he bore six scarlet rings;
One for each wife he had long since forgot
Each had once held his heart in a knot
And at times he remembered their final screams
As he ripped, bit and tore them apart at the seams,
He saw them through his devil's eyes
As his look was drawn upwards to stare at the skies
That were reddening slowly under his gaze
And he found himself trapped in that desolate maze
Of his mind
That was broken
So he stopped all alone and looked at his token;
It was a shiny, metal gun and how it sparkled so clear,
Then he blew out his brains and got rid of his fear,
And the Reaper fell down on that lonesome old road
No more was the Reaper but still his blood showed
The sins of his past; the deaths of his wives
Their blood was still there, stained on the knives
In his cloak that he wore,
And the Reaper had sinned no more,
No more.



Copyright 2008 Alex Hodson
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Comments (12)
Posted by colemoriss
2008-05-30 10:27:49
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i like it! you did an excellent job! sound familar
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Posted by eloquent atrament
2008-05-30 11:08:48
goose bumps.

Morbid. Every word was so visually clear...
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Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe
2008-05-30 12:49:45
not sure

Not sure what your trying to convey here. The reaper to me is the devil himself, or his cronie that gathers the dead(grimm reaper),,crazy to think that he had six wives or that he would kill himself being.. well the devil himself perhaps. If he was just a man who had a consiuos from killing all his wives..why refer to him as the reaper...this had holes that need filling,,,or maybe im just missing it.

interesting how this has so many other hits then those around it...?
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Posted by Hodders
2008-05-30 12:53:35
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Well I called him 'The Reaper' because of the fact that he has killed six of his wives in the past and that he is death in his own mind.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-05-30 15:45:15
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this may perhaps be one of the best poems i have ever read. you did a superb job writing it, each word was fantastic! great job, bravo, kudos
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-05-30 16:32:24
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yea great poem! i really liked the whole reaper idea. i hope you make another poem just as superb!
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Posted by lemon
2008-05-30 23:27:32
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I thought this was really good! I had no trouble picturing this in my head. keep posting :)
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-06-02 18:07:09
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Thats a beutiful piece. I felt like I was reading a country folks tale, sung around the campfire. This had good rythm and structure, and was about something clear and pointed, not vaguely aluding to things so you second guess the meaning
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Posted by indianaman130
2008-06-06 15:48:33
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Stunning, fantastic word play,

Poe like flow with fluid visuals.
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Posted by strawberrywino
2008-06-12 03:16:49
i think it was good

but would be great if you fix the part that broke the rhyme.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-06-12 04:50:18
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That part of the rhyme is meant to be broken to show how his mind is broken.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-07-24 02:05:47
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Finally, the reaper laid himself to rest. Poetic justice was done. The blood of his wives tainted his soul and he couldn't carry forward. What was the point. Live had come to an end. Tragic.
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