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When We Set Foot On Dry Land


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Written by Kasi   
Monday, 19 May 2008
ImageI tear through the brush of the greenest stinging grass
The clay beneath- waterlogged, permitting me a torpid pass
The wind yells crescendo as I leap into the night
I realize I am going places where there may be no moonlight

What is this hammering I hear, an internal drum to my fight
Stealing my breath this mistress of sight
The air exhales its vast lung
Pushing precipitation that may as well have been slung thru the barrel of a gun

My ears do not believe what visuals I perceive
A minds needless race, execrable thoughts; I need to get away from this place
Never look back, feeling heat from their flame
They are much smaller than me, though I fear them the same

Babbles and chants I cannot comprehend
Speaking only through actions, non violent till the end
Dances so soulful send your spine a barbaric chill
More horrific when you realize what to them is a thrill

Faces painted for battle splattered with mud
At closer stare I noticed their faces were stained with blood
Starting to accept I may not live through the darkness
Trying not to think of what evil can be harnessed

A snag from a branch all tattered with thorns has torn my skin
Percolation of vital fluid, my strength has begun to wear thin
I discern that my arduous limbs are giving in,
This contention for deliverance makes my judgment spin.

I take refuge behind a dense philodendron
It’s under growth teeming with insects, they have no choice but to be stepped on
I listen for voices the silence is thick,
I think back to my boat torn apart stick by stick
If it hadn't hit those rocks, I could vanish, quick

I reminisce of the moment we set foot on dry land
Contemplative pride, solace at hand
I looked at her and she at me,
Then I recall we once were three.
Had they escaped or been taken captive
Made into slaves turned adaptive

I bethink. I could feel the sting as her eyes hit mine
When we ventured through the brushwood
And stumbled on to the barbaric shrine
Torches flickered an amiable flame
No moon tonight, only rain
Sheets that showered a cloud had burst
I felt for her hand and expected the worst

Then the pound, the echo, the drum
I looked at her once more and told her to run.
We made tracks thru the mud simultaneous as one
I thought our journey together had hardly begun.

I sit here now with this pang in my chest
My sentiment for her I attest.

To Be Continued.



Copyright 2008 Kasi
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Comments (9)
Posted by Kasi
2008-05-19 12:44:15
I hate first comments...

Criticism isn't really constructive... But its good to know.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-05-19 15:25:35
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this was really good. eager to see the next chapter. i wish my poems could have this much thought pumped into them.
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Posted by nick711
2008-05-19 18:56:36
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yeah i really liked this one, it had a great story behind it, and i could tell there was a hidden meaning. in the first few stanzas there was a weird rhythm, but in the later stanza's i was questioning the rhyme scheme. oh well, it was a pretty good poem.
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Posted by lobiva nadha
2008-05-20 01:24:26
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well, very nice. I liked it.
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Posted by Juda
2008-05-21 10:22:20
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your stuff is unbelievably mature. You are growing so much.
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Posted by eloquent atrament
2008-05-27 20:40:00
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Thank you!
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Posted by emkay4597
2008-06-21 22:58:58
I hate poems

I roll my eyes when some cute girl explains "I write poems", but really, you do seem to write poetry. I actually read it. It was great. I'm no authority on poetic structure (nor prose for that matter) but I liked it.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-07 04:00:29
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This poem was inspiring! I will be reading the next one, thats for sure.

I really liked the lines "Starting to accept I may not live through the darkness/Trying not to think of what evil can be harnessed."

Superb work.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-20 23:04:32
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Superb. This is a charming piece of writing that I have read in recent times. One must always strive to strike a chord in a reader’s heart. You have achieved it in great measure. Good job. Keep it up. ;-)
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