At the end of a dimly lit hallway stood a locked door. There was

nothing significant about this door. Structurally it was the same as

most. Six raised panels made of hard painted wood with a single

cylindrical antique brass knob. The door was hung on the left side

(with three typical brass hinges) and swung into the hall. There is no

word better to describe this door than the word plain, no elaborate

carvings dawned its surface nor was there any decorative moldings

tracing its jamb. There were many doors in the cabin and like the main

entrance, each of them was left open. Only this particular door had

been left sealed, locked tight from any intrusions.

Why? Or Who for that matter?

 Was it the cabins previous owner who kept the key buried with him

beneath ecklin's cemetery or maybe some traveler, lost and weary from

the rigors of the mountain rested his head behind this door and never

woke. Maybe the door had simply been locked by mistake and merely

guarded an empty room. Just cold darkness trapped for decades.

Waiting to escape and fill the lungs of the person who finally picks the

lock and discovers the secret of this ordinary door that's locked

presence was so unordinary.

Keyword: The locked door

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Posted by M.Feinstein 2008-05-18 06:53:27 ... interested in what you may think, good or bad + Report this comment
Posted by alfred 2008-05-18 08:16:39 bad This story(if that is... what it is) goes nowhere. What was the point to it. It answered no questions that the poor reader is left with. A story needs a beginning, middle and end....thank god this had an end. Not trying to be mean,,,just needs to be better. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-05-18 09:14:50 .... hmm i didn't think this was bad. i thought you conveyed the whole locked door pretty well. because everyone always has the curiosity surrounding a door that has never been opened and they want to know what exactly is on the other side. i think maybe you could have gone a little more in depth but i thought it was good. + Report this comment
Posted by 1800 2008-05-18 14:17:29 .... Curiosity killed the cat...but I am dying to know what that door hides. + Report this comment
Posted by M.Feinstein 2008-05-21 06:44:49 forgot forgot to include to be continued. Can you ever forgive me? + Report this comment
Posted by eloquent atrament 2008-05-21 09:45:35 Juda, I cant wait.... Till you finish this one... + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-05-21 14:40:49 .... It brings out the interest in what's behind the door but something should happen. Even if the door doesn't open there could be a watchman or owner who tries to rid the door of any interested parties intent on opening it. Add more and it could be cool. + Report this comment
Posted by Juda 2008-05-22 14:51:07 In progress Thanks for the motivation guys. I am steadily working on the next part. + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-05-23 01:14:13 Locked Door Interesting start..........now go for the rest of it. Lots of possibilities. Phil + Report this comment
Posted by lorislittlesecret 2008-05-23 08:34:19 .... Okay..you caught me..what's next? + Report this comment
Posted by CELL 2008-05-23 09:38:33 .... Yeah, the ending was rather abrupt, but I understand that there will be a continuation. You've definitely, I think, captured your reader's attention. Personally, you've swayed this mind of mine into curiosity. Did a real good job with imagery too. Will read the next part. + Report this comment
Posted by Juda 2008-05-23 22:24:56 ... you guys are great. + Report this comment
Posted by darkwriter 2008-05-25 10:56:43 The Locked Door This was an intriguing bit of writing. Excellent job making it flow. I'm definately interested in reading more! Well done, Juda. + Report this comment
Posted by Juda 2008-05-25 20:55:59 ... I took lemons advice and changed this to an intro rather then a chapter. + Report this comment
Posted by eloquent atrament 2008-05-27 13:19:03 .... It does work well as an intro. + Report this comment
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