So there thoughts i had when writing a letter tonight... its a rough draft will edit and make many changes at a later time...Just some thoughts in the raw..; )

He walks away

with only hurtful things left to say

The words 'I hate you' seem to just replay

Looking up with sad eyes

wondering if this really is the demise

A tear falls silently down my cheek

thinking of what could, should, would

but now will never be.

Keyword: when its over

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Posted by Bomber 2008-05-12 05:18:37 .... Captures the anguish of a failed relationship well. Looking forwards to more. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-05-12 13:55:33 .... yea i agree with Bomber. it was short but it delivered it's message quite well and strongly. i liked its flow also. good poem. + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-05-12 16:44:28 .... It's really tight which is nice. I liked it. + Report this comment
Posted by AuThEnTiC 2008-05-16 23:57:13 .... thankyou guys... very kind..; ) + Report this comment

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