The People From The Sky I: Man On The Moon THE PEOPLE FROM THE SKY PART I:... My Present I wrote this poem and had RE Potter look it over. ...

self infilcted pain.

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Written by joyjoy

Friday, 09 May 2008

in the middle of great bliss i remember your sweet kiss enjoying myself with laughter i hear a voice saying forever surroungding me is peace then i smell you scent in the breeze i look at my reflection and i see a smile then i turn to my eyes and knew it will take quite a while.. Copyright 2008 joyjoy Keyword: self infilcted pain. Report this story | Add to Favorites | Send to Friends | Author's Profile No Comments posted Comments (2) Posted by Egoist 2008-05-09 09:12:19 .... Quite short, but powerful. I liked it, your rhyming and timing was very neat, but I can't tell if it's meant to be sad of happy, so I have a very confusing emotion going on when I read this. But I could see where it would take quite a while. Very nice. + Report this comment Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-05-09 14:02:52 .... i did enjoy this. it seemed positive at first glance but i think once you read it and really take it in you can see that has a very negative tone. i have to say and please forgive me but they're are a couple mistakes in this and i think of you fixed them it would be clearer to read. but good poem. + Report this comment Post a comment Post a comment

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