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Written by b.k.   
Thursday, 10 April 2008

I hate this person,

This thing that I have become,

I no longer feel,

I'm officially numb,

 

I've been betrayed and broken,

Several times in the past,

developed a wall,

And hid behind a mask,

 

I thought that you loved me,

I suppose it was a lie,

Like everything else,

It was another disguise,

 

You were supposed to be my rock,

The person i could count on,

But like everyone else,

You are now gone,

 

I was foolish to think,

That there was someone I could trust,

Someone that needed me,

But it was only lust,

 

I guess everyone has,

Their point of no return,

One failure too many,

A life they wish to burn,

 

Well congratulations,

You were the one to break my soul,

Where my heart once was,

There's a big gaping hole



Copyright 2008 b.k.
Keyword: Breaking Point
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Comments (5)
Posted by sgulab
2008-04-10 13:51:02
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aww that was nice. :D i mean it kinda made me sad but it was nice. great job. :D
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Posted by Roadkill315
2008-04-10 15:23:32
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sad indeed, good job conveying it!
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-04-10 19:18:16
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hmmmm i know these feelings. it seems as though you and i like to convey the same things. this was really good. Big gaping holes, yea that's all there is left.
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Posted by Egoist
2008-05-06 18:22:02
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One of the most beautiful and ugliest things to experience. Love. You convey your emotions very well without overdoing it. It's a great talent.
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-07 10:44:10
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Well spoken.

You have a talent to use words to your advantage. GOod rhyming and flow.

Many writers that I've read use commas after every line and a lot of times it breaks the flow. You do very well to keep the flow. GOod job.
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