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Written by Mathew Scamardella   
Friday, 04 April 2008
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War is Hell

By

Mathew Scamardella (Doctor)

2010 the planet Earth becomes two parts, Southern World and Northern World. 2015 the two new worlds declare war on earch other, making it World War 3 then in 2020, because the Southern world had some great physical fighters and was getting High Tech Nuclear weaponery guns. The Northern World leader declares that using the unlimited and ultimate energy of pure moon light, which was made from moon rock which made the ten Special Technical Marines. 2021 these Marines were made 2030 only two of these marines were the most best one the rest were killed 2032 One more marine was killed by the Southern Warrior. A door opens and brakes the silence that was held in the Office of the Northern world General a person walks through the door this person is a tall military looking men walks over to the Northern world general then the General gets up and the two salutes each other and then sits and the General says to the men “Right Captain Max I will cut right to the chase you have been called here today because the we have received an S.O.S from the Battalion 101 in the Southern Hot Zone Base” and Max asks “way was the Battalion sent Sir” and the General answers “because they were supposed to steal the stolen plans the plans got here but then the S.O.S” and Max asks “way are you sending me Sir” and the General answers “because you are the most effective Special Technical Marine any more Questions” and Max said “Yes when do I leave sir” and the General said “right now by Transmatt” and so the two gets up and salutes and max runs to the Transmatt room and gets transported to the Abounded Base. When Max got to the base it was very cloudy and dark and very cold like a storm was coming the base was defiantly abounded so Max pulls out his gun and walks very slowly calling out the captain’s name out but there was no answer the whole base was dead silence until a medium size person comes out from a tree and says “Hallow Max” and Max lowered his gun and says “John but how I saw you die by that Southern warrior one year ago” he seemed really confused and then John said “That was all an act” and Max asks “But way John” and he said “because of an traitor in the Northern Government and now will you join me” and Max says “No I will never betray the Northern World” and John says “Came on join me we are both Special Technical Marines and friends join me and we will crash the Northern Government” and Max yells “GO TO HELL” and then John got angry and said “fine then I will kill you” and the a roar of thunder breaks and it starts to rain when the two draw their guns but John shoot Max gun out of his hand and max run up and pulls his gun out of Johns hand. But then grabs his arm and puts max in an arm lock but Max elbows John in the head and pushes him away but John runs at Max with a punch and then Max sidekicks John in the head then goes for a round side kick but John blokes the side kick and punches Max in the head three times. But on the forth punch John let Max’s leg go and Max blocked the punch and parms John under the chin. Then John went down to the ground but Max pulls him up and punch Max in the head and just knocks him out and max runs for his gun but then John got up and tackled Max to the wet muddy ground before he could get his gun and John punch max in the face then John picks up the gun but then Max side sweeps John to the ground and got up and grabbed the cold gun the John started to get up but max stomps on his chest and place his foot on John chest and said sadly with a tear coming from his eye “I wish there was a another way you were my only friend I am sorry” and pulled the Trigger and ended John’s life which made Max the last Special Technical Marine and also introduce Max to the Horror of war and Max thought said to himself “War is Hell” and then pulled out his communicator and asked for emergency Transmatt and when it was activated he left for the Northern Base.      

Copyright 2008 Doctor
Keyword: War Hell Max John
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Comments (10)
Posted by Doctor
2008-04-04 04:26:23
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If you have any comments plese share them with me
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Posted by ThomasP3
2008-04-04 06:55:50
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Hey Dr., creative, but I was confused. There is a lot going on here, in very little time. Also, the use of some punctuation would make it a bit easier of a read. Keep it up though, you have some good ideas, maybe focus on a smaller time frame?
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Posted by thirteen
2008-04-04 11:14:19
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These future sci fi sories always go down well here.I would work on the gramar a bit .
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Posted by Roadkill315
2008-04-04 11:22:21
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Personally, stories which start with a block of history are not too engaging, just my opionion. That said, I do like your story idea here and would love to see it expanded into a fuller body of work. You no doubt have the creativity to capture the imagination.
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Posted by CAS
2008-04-04 13:57:50
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Respectafully, I disagree with Roadkill, I enjoy this story very much and enjoy the history at th begining, althogh i do beleive that you should seperate it a little more and explain. Whi is it divided? Why the war?
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Posted by pwnanator
2008-04-04 16:53:52
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You've got a good Idea going, but it seems like you're trying to put to much into information into to short of a time, and it leaves a few unanswered questions. And as stated above, it could use some grammar work.
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Posted by R.E.Potter
2008-04-04 17:38:31
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With a lil work on the delivery and punc probs...you have the potential for something bigger here.
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Posted by Rams117
2008-04-04 20:28:04
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I like the idea. It's just jumbled up and needs to give a few less answers to make it intrigueing (Did I spell that right?). Another thing when your writing try to show us the background in your story maybe through a conversation or a characters thoughts instead of just directly telling us.
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Posted by Doctor
2008-04-05 00:09:03
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With this story i am making a better one
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Posted by celtic1888
2008-04-06 01:51:46
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Pretty hard to read due to the grammar but fairly enjoyable anyway. With a good edit I am sure it will be far better. Good effort
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