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Here and Back Again


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Written by Nate Stanford   
Thursday, 03 April 2008
Stone wheels rolled down make-shift roads.
Man lived in huts, fur patching the abode.
By dark, the males return with their kill.
Not even cooking it, before getting their fill.
For centuries, everyone answered, not asked.
While the answer of creation lie behind his mask. 
 
Then, the clatter of swords, made all the matter,
Flags bore symbols; a bear, a lion, an adder.
By that time, people began to question the fact,
that kept all of life until now, intact.
People were killed; on a count of treason.
Torchured and hanged, all without a good reason.
 
It wasn't for decades, until we stopped fighting science.
Seemingly, we had a worldly compliance.
Color and belief was the new question.
That only a white man had the power of expression.
They fought back, and there was a war.
Crimes were committed; to settle the score.
 
Four rubber wheels roll down a paved street. 
Riding towards its suffering; its defeat.
If we cannot omit all the various hate,
Our race will be marked with an expiration date.
Even though we've chiseled creation down to the bone.
I fear those wheels will gradually turn to stone. 
 
 
 
 


Copyright 2008 Nate Stanford
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Posted by allmine
2008-05-05 14:30:27
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I know I read this, and I did think it was awesome. Why in the heck didn't I comment on it, I don't know. This is a wonderful piece of work. Now I am going to go read some of your others.
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Posted by The_Gimp
2008-05-05 14:55:08
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Interesting poem my friend, the rhymes aren't "quite" right since "asked" and "mask" just sounds alike hehe! ;) And it's tortured not torchured.

Anyway you had a good idea there and that's what really matters, it was nicely done! Keep it up buddy!
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Posted by R.E.Potter
2008-05-05 17:55:12
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Thought this was really good. in a way it reminds me of my poem (how far)...selfish plug I know. Great job.
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Posted by Vango
2008-05-05 18:08:10
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One of the best poems I ever read.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-05-05 19:39:57
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Very good stuff, and yes we havent changed our basic natures throughout history have we? The science changes our lives but we're not evolving to match it
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-05-11 18:17:46
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really liked how you went through history. and i loved the ending. a thought provoking piece, for sure.
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