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Death of a Gangster: What IF


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Written by Cory   
Thursday, 27 March 2008
Image         I had gotten in to deep. There where seven guns pointed at me, three 45s and four 9mm. Wasn’t this some crap. I just knew I was going to get shot. I was unarmed and was likely dead, but on the table 3 feet away there was a fully loaded 9mm.          I jumped behind the table with a rush of nervousness and checked the chamber. Hollow tips. The Crips began shooting at the table and I pointed the gun at the one with dred locks.          “ Cedar Blcok nigga.” I yelled shooting him twice in the chest. Blood hit the floor and I smiled. “ Blood for a blood nigga.”          I shot again and hit another one in the chest. I wasted the rest of the shots and noticed the door to my side was cracked open. I ran for it and got throught ok, but just barely. I began running like Forest Gump.         I heard the squeal of tires after running a block and saw three black guys wearing blue chasing me. I ran even faster when I saw a familiar sight. Inglewood’s very own Z-Roc. Z was in his low-rider and spotted my red. I was a Cedar Block Pirus, and we where on good terms. He pulled out his gun and blasted the crip away. I jumped in his ride and we left.         He asked if I was ok and I told him yes. Soon we saw another bad thing that made me want to just slap someone. Blue lights. Z hit the gas and took us down Inglewood. We ran the streets for a while whenever the tires where shot out by a officer in a car.          I bailed and ran in the general direction of my hood of the Pirus. I ran faster than when the Crips where shooting at me when ever I saw my mother. Only one problem:         My mother had been dead for three years now.         I snapped back to reality and looked at the seven guns and the 9 on the table. I jumped behind it and grabbed the 9. They shot up the table and three shots hit my back. They burned coldly, as weird as that sound and I felt my shirt become sticky and wet. I aimed the 9 and fired at the one with dred locks. The gun was un-loaded.         “ 83 Gangster Crips nigga.” He said and shot me in the fore head. I felt my self go blank, is saw their faces but couldn’t move, couldn’t breathe, couldn’t feel pain. I only thought I wish that daggumed gun was loaded.

Copyright 2008 Cory
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Posted by The_Gimp
2008-03-28 10:40:11
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Hmmmm foreshadowing wasn't bad, but please reformat the text and correct the typos, it is hard to read because of them. The idea is cool, I would only suggest to add some more details and it would be awesome! Great try nonetheless! 3.5/5!
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Posted by Xena
2008-03-28 15:59:04
hey

I was in Inglewood once and this exact thing happened to me!... ok this never happend to me.. but i did wonder into inglewood at like 2am after landing in LA.. and some bum started following me so i checked into a cheap motel where the asian owner gave me gave me a 5$ discount cause i paid in cash.. so you got to admit this was still pretty gangster..
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Posted by Vango
2008-03-29 09:41:26
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I thought it was a great story with a neat idea
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