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I woke up yesterday morning like I would any other morning. I got up, ate breakfast, took shower, got dressed. Like I would any other morning.

This is my springbreak, you know I being lazy. sitting around watching TV.

Its beautiful day, the suns out, its not to hot. I like to wear jeans, I hate shorts.

so I decide to go for a walk, cause you know its nice day.

So I'm walking right and I'm about 2-3 blocks away from my house and I see this guy.

He's walking on the other side of the street, going the opposte direction I am.

I thought nothing of it. I live in a nice neighborhood. He didn't look like someone that wouold live in my neighborhood but its nice heighborhood. Nothing bad ever happens in my neighborhood. Its full of old people other than my self. 

He was a young guy, about my age, he was black.

 I have no problems with black people.

So I'm walking, not thinking anything of him.

I see him walking over to my side of the street, and you know I didn't think anything about him crossing. I was thinking he was going to house on this side of the street.

So we're walking towards eachother aned I see he's holding something. He's to far away for me to see what it is so I think nothing of it.

And as we get closer to each other I start to realize he was holding a gun and then he points it at me.

And you know I thinking oh **** I'm going to die.

I stop walking and he's still walking tolwards me.

Then everything became silent and the next I know I'm running towards him.

I grab the gun and try to pry it out of his hand.as I'm trying to get the gun out of his hand he starts hitting me with his other hand.

Finally I get the gun out of his hand and throw it on the ground.

And then the next thing I know he's on the ground and I'm on top of him.

It was like I was out side of my body, watching myself beat the **** out of this guy.

I was hiting him and his whole face is covered with blood.

Then this car pulled and I'm thinking somebody came to help me.

But it turns out they came to help the other guy.

It was two other guys, one grabs me and pins my arms behind my back. The other guy starts hitting me.

He's hiting me in the face and he broke my nose. Then hitts me in the ribs and could have sworn I heard one of my ribbs crack.

And you know I'm in pain and I start praying for him stop. It was about then when he stopped.

Then the guy holding me hits me in the kidney. I colapse to knees.

THe guy that was hitting me helps the guy I was hitting up and takes him to the car.

I'm thinking thank god he stopped. But I feel something hard being pressed against the back of my head. I assumed it was a gun and I'm thinking **** I'm going to die.

One of his friends says "Come on,"

I guessed he pistol whiped me. He probably inteneded to knock me out but he didn't. so I pretend to be unconscience and I feel him take my wallet. he throws the wallet on the ground, took all twenty four dollars, got back in the car and drove off.

I get up, my ribbs hurt, my whole body hurts. I'm broken and bleeding.I sit up on the curb and I start thinking that I could have been killed.

I stand up, I teetered a little and I start walking back home.

Then the car that these guys were in comes back and stops. The driver rolls down the window and points the gun at me....

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Posted by Dirkin 2008-03-28 04:33:45 .... Please please please remove the last sentence. It is fine without it being a dream + Report this comment
Posted by lorislittlesecret 2008-03-28 11:50:09 .... Typos... + Report this comment
Posted by billyboy 2008-03-29 05:27:05 .... I agree with Dirk, except I would say forget the last TWO sentences. Good yarn otherwise. Simple spelling mistakes and missing words are distracting. Keep writing Billy. + Report this comment
Posted by Roadkill315 2008-03-29 17:02:50 .... Leave out the last sentance or two? And then it ends with him just walking back home? Seems that would be open and less fulfilling. At least with his ending he either woke up for a dream, or, if intended to be real then he but the dust. + Report this comment
Posted by R.E.Potter 2008-03-30 06:52:12 ,,, Now that's a bad day. Good story but you need to watch with your delivery, and sentence phrasing. But I like the guys attitude,,,get the shit beat out of ya and pistoled whipped...then look at the bright side((it could of been worse)). again,,fun read. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-03-31 16:53:36 .... i can't imagine how that must have felt. it just goes to show even a nice looking neighborhood holds its demons. nowhere is safe anymore in my opinion. unless you live in some cave or hole far away from civilization. good read though. + Report this comment
Posted by cookingWine 2008-04-03 17:58:06 .... Heard this story a million times before from white kids getting their lunch money stolen (minus the shooting). This is the kind of thing that adds to a story, not makes one. I don't really think it's necessary to call him black, not to be racially insensitive, but most reading this story would assume it. Regardless, not needed. Too is for an addition. To is for everything else. "Learn how to use punctuation," said the nitpicker. + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-04 09:04:51 .... Structured well, and as above careful with the spellings. I wouldn't take anything out of the content though, it's ok as it is. Phil + Report this comment

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