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            “They say they come when you die to take your soul away to another life.  But, what if they just started coming without the precursor of death?  What if they broke the rules?”

            “I think I’d pee my pants, Mike,” Grant spoke, giggling a little, “I’d urinate right down my leg.”

            “Grant, they’re here.”

            Grant chuckled loudly, “I don’t hear no screaming, dude.”

            “There will be.”

            Grant chuckled louder, but that soon stopped when he heard a screeching noise that hurt his ears, “What the—” Grant looked about, but then focused back on Mike and smiled, “Nice try, dude.  Nice try.”

            “Sorry, Grant,” Mike said, “I did a bad thing.”

            The banshees crashed through the windows, they grabbed Grant and he struggled, Mike spoke to him as he pulled back into a huddled position, “Don’t fight it, man.”

            Grant screamed and kicked and punched and pushed and jumped and fell and it only got worse.  They grabbed, their hands cutting flesh at the touch.  Grant eventually fell to the ground, convulsing, shaking, shivering, cold from the loss of blood.  The room was wet with red.  Grant looked to Mike, pulling at a blanket on the seat next to him, he pulled it down on himself, “Help… help… it’s cold…”

            Mike, with tears in his eyes, repeated, “I did a bad thing, man.”

            “Dude,” those were his last words.  The banshees grabbed him, this time without a fight and they pulled him through a window, his body catching on broken glass and ripping more flesh on the way out.  The blanket fell to the floor, covered in Grant’s blood.

            Mike listened as the screams and the cracking of the whip faded out of earshot.  He moved from his seat and into his bedroom, he slid under his blanket and cried, shivering and repeating, “I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry…”

Keyword: Screaming Banshees

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Posted by Howler 2008-03-20 23:02:23 .... Hi! its a good story with a good buildup. But you could focus a bit on the ending... it does fizz out a wee bit. Dialog's good, very realistic and so's the flow. Just focus a bit on the ending n you'll end up with a kickass story :) On the whole, a very good job :) + Report this comment
Posted by thirteen 2008-03-21 04:59:06 .... Good read + Report this comment
Posted by thirteen 2008-03-21 05:07:21 .... But I think It needs more though, + Report this comment
Posted by onyxdragon 2008-03-24 06:30:05 Hmm... Yeah, I realize the ending didn't resolve or explain anything. I was thinking of writing some more. + Report this comment

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