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If The Sun Didn't Rise

IF THE SUN DIDN'T RISE BY JON STALK...

One cut too many


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Written by b.k.   
Monday, 10 March 2008

I lie here,

in a pool of blood,

the once soft trickle of tears,

has turned to a flood,

 

Finally,

a cut that is too profound,

one I won't recover from,

my fate is now sealed and bound,

 

Memories haunted me,

day by day,

in my mind,

thoughts of you continuously replayed,

 

I couldn't escape them,

it was just too much,

I thought I could depend on you,

you had been my crutch,

 

I should have known,

you were like everyone else,

that the only one I could truly depend on,

was I, me, and myself,

 

I honestly loved you,

couldn't you see?,

you were the only one,

that could ever set me free,

 

I guess I wasn't good enough,

because now you love her,

I couldn't make you come back,

to my pleads you wouldn't defer,

 

So now I lie,

in an eternal sleep,

for what you sow,

is what you shall reap



Copyright 2008 b.k.
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Comments (6)
Posted by thirteen
2008-03-10 16:48:34
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I really liked this, beautiful and sad.Well done b.k
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Posted by Egoist
2008-03-10 17:20:36
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Excellent. This is such a great poem, so depressing and yet so vivid. The last two phrases would be my favorites. I'm always looking for poems with great endings, and you did a great job.

I feel as though this was a realistic poem in the way it was written. It's very descriptive in feelings and can actually be hurtful to read. I liked it a lot, it was full of emotion.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-03-10 17:35:44
Beautifully Depressing

This is definetily one of my favorite depressing poems i have read on here by far. I have enjoyed this so much. And I really loved your ending with the reap what you sow. I can also identify with this poem as well. Some people can cause you so much hurt and you take all that hurt and push it all back into yourself. This will be going to my favorites for sure.
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Posted by lemon
2008-03-10 18:54:19
very well done

The emotion was written in very well
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Posted by Roadkill315
2008-04-10 15:34:08
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trying to end my day on a high note, and I read this. I'll take my high from acknowledging that you have poetic talent.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-12 19:22:59
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This is so true. In life, one has to primarily depend on one's own self. Even in love, there can be trecheary. The wisdom of life dawned late on you. Sad.
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