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They're All Gonna Laugh at You


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Written by Anna DeVine   
Wednesday, 05 March 2008
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They're All Gonna Laugh at You 




 

I think I've finally figured out
The reason I can't write
Apparently my pen's in shock
From what I wrote last night

Desire stirred my heart awake
To write of love in rhyme 
And passion missed upon my lips
Agreed that it was time

'Your pen will only get confused'
My voice of Reason said
'You need to stick to what you know
And write of love that's dead'

I reasoned with my Reasoning
And yes, of course, I won
After which my Logic said,
'Oh this just can't be done'

When Lunacy said, 'Hurry up' 
 Impatience had to snicker 
And though I never said a word 
I still could hear them bicker

I think it was Insanity 
Who said, 'She can't be wrong'
 Since Logic tried convincing me
Love sings a tragic song 

And when I tried to write about
How love could never end
Well, that is when I heard a laugh
Come from my favorite pen 

 


 



Copyright 2008 Anna DeVine
Keyword: Not Love
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Comments (8)
Posted by Pez
2008-03-05 09:17:07
Heh.

The title, "they're all gonna laugh at you" reminded me of the movie: Carrie. Hehehe.

But on to the review:

I liked the first stanza, (I was telling myself, "this is going to be good") but after that I forced myself to read the rest. It just didn't live up to what the first stanza was offering.

I liked what you were trying to do. Having all of these mental states collide; interesting form of brainstorming.

I thought you could of done so much more with such a great concept. I was a little disappointed, I'm afraid.
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-03-05 11:01:06
Thank yer very much fer time in review

Speaks fer yer character.But LOL,this is far from brainstorming.I want to write of love.Poetically opulent are verses written by a smitten Poet. I lack romance,so it's just depressing.Rather than crash in bed with 'we're doomed'I talk to me emotions.I have written about sixty verses fer the Easily Amused,and each verse I pick a cast.Like this one I chose Desire,Insanity, Reason,Logic,Impatience,Passion.Lunacy,my pen,and meself to stave off sorrow.I would like to improve this,but don' know what else I to say to meself.I checked the thoughts outside the box,and second thoughts caught not a thought yet gotta lotta time in rhyme and nothing less to say,and I kinda sort of caught the thought I sought today.Love is my inanity,a tragic tale I know,so racing thoughts, and there are lots,are constantly aflow.Close to wisdom watch me come but lemme tell ya it is hard in nonsense to partake.But I want to make each verse the best that it can be,so yer thoughts Id love to help my Poetry.

'Anna
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Posted by Pez
2008-03-05 13:33:10
I gotcha.

Yes, I did catch that.

You were sort of unsure of what angle of 'love' to write about, and so these alter egos of yours speak out...

There are so many (angles, I mean):

fairy tale

tragic

triangle

realistic

fake

dreamt

inexistent...

lots, really.

No worries, I got it; and I did like what you were talking about, it just left me wanting more.
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-03-05 14:23:44
Me books are full and me art is tired

Thank yer fer yer feedback again, I have completed me fairy Poetry tale book, and me tragic sicky book has over hundred verses already, me daily Fish book sort of covers the other's with the three hundred verses. I have a tribute Poety book, a heritage one, one fer me Muse, one historical one, a science/physics one, a Clairvoyant one, a music one,Poetry that glorifies Poetry, a domestic violence one and a geological one. These are all full so I started what I'm working on now that this verse will be going in titled: 'How to be Easily Amused', the other sixty chapters have a nonsensical/ satirical theme so I would like work something that is in accordance with what I have already incorporated there. What is Triangle? I am most intrigued, would it fit me genre here?

It's hard coming up with new ideas fer me here lately. I don't know what me problem is, well I do, and indeed I am hating it. hehe

But yeah, Triangle Poetry, do tell...

Please

Thanks again, yer very kind.

'Anna
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Posted by tarhead
2008-03-05 19:01:04
interesting

problem, I think... to wonder what the next thousand will be about...

that may be why I leave poetry to the poets... in my field of pleasure it is better described as dictation rather than creative requirement. few rules beyond amusement apply...

I liked it...

for better of for worse - especially when one is bound to verse - there are always peaks and valleys - and opportunity for playfullness to fight through that serious stone that poets are supposed to sharpen their wit opon...

well then, that will be enough of that for the moment!
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-03-05 20:40:46
Thank yer fer yer review

As well as yer wise commentary.

Damn, I love yer quote tarnoggin', its very clever.

Yer know, it's funny how inanity got me into that discourse, but failed to get me out of it huh? hehe

Even still, I don't mind going nowhere as long as it's an interesting path as each step I take never laughs beyond a dreamer's mile, a knowing wink or an abstract blink. They're all inside smirks to me along my laughing path to nowhere.

*Winks*

Aye

Thanks again,

'Anna
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Posted by Pez
2008-03-06 08:10:07
....

Oh no... it's really not too intriguing. What I meant is: a love triangle. Married woman having an affair, husband finds out and she has to choose between one or the other... that's all :).
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-03-19 12:29:02
....

No problem with this. Good.
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