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Written by Umbra   
Thursday, 28 February 2008
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The lands of sheogorath should not be steped in lightly, all who enter the fringe should not expect admission from the gate keeper, unless they have the mark of sheogorath. Unless ofcourse they plan to destroy the keeper of the mad lord sheogoraths realm. He who guards the gates is no man, no woman, and no decented to mankind. He is a child of evil and yet seeks no will to hurt those that arnt within his grove of rock, and will not touch anyone who does not seek entrance into the gates of madness, unless of cours provoked. To many who know him he is actually quit noble and kind, to an advetuerer who does not know him he is a giant, 3 ton monster with the will to destroy anything. He is the ultiment defensive tool to keep the weak out of lands that are only sutible for a deadric prince to walk. However usefull and strong, it was not a deadric prince who crafted the gatekepper, it was an old woman with many children, children that are crafted from dead bodys and failed experments of agony. Hes is stiched together using the threads of gaint deadric spiders who stand at the hight of a mans chest. His legs come from oblivion itself, his chest from a thousand dead solders who gave there life to an anceit mad king. His arms are as strong as a falling mountain. His head is covered with steal to keep insain thoughts from entering his mind, and to keep already insain thoughts locked away, for if the keeper had a mind of his own the fringe on the outskirts of sheogoraths mad realm woud be a display no mortal could bear. It takes the essence of breath to allow him to breath, the heart of mammoth to pump his blood through his veins, and the shock of  strong magics to purge life through his soul.

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Posted by Umbra
2008-02-28 15:51:29
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ofc i mispelled a lot of words and it wasnt quite right, but this is my first story to this site, i wanted to try it out. Have a good day everyone, lol i bet theres so many more creative storys than this one on this site :)
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Posted by tarhead
2008-02-28 16:57:41
I think

you should take the time, sit down, and fix it. you have a good theme going - it would be a shame if it did not get the credit it deserves because of spelling errors...

many of us loons can only read so far into a bad spelling/grammer/punctuation situation before retreating.

keep writing!
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Posted by Umbra
2008-02-29 19:39:13
Thank you

I know what you mean, when you have good grammer and notice all misspelled words its hard to see the story when your busy looking at the spelling errors, i was that way too when grammer was fresh in my head. Thank you for your advice im gonna use spell check a lot more and proof read as i go more often. Have a good day :)
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Posted by Crazy Scott
2008-04-14 11:57:21
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Aside from the misspellings and such, it's a good read. As I'm familiar with the subject of Sheogorath and all, you may take my counsel on this--the Gatekeeper is living on borrowed time...

*laughs* For the realm!
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