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Written by Shoosh Russelcrust   
Wednesday, 27 February 2008
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    A silver coin reflected into Whit's left eye. Dimes, nickels, quarters, one by one, he'd get there. This time, it was a simple five cent advance.
    "A nickle mean that much to you?" said Rob.
    Whit put the nickel in a pocket in his wallet and zipped it shut. The pocket buldged with change and jingled like a tamborine into his back pocket. Back from his younger days he remembered another kid saying that if you collect all the change you see and put it into an account, you'll get rich without having to work for it. Whit was working on twelve years of collecting orphan change and depositing it without exception. So far, he only had seventy-three dollars and eighty-seven cents.
    "Not really," Whit said. "No. They don't. But remember you said that the next time you need change," Whit said.
    When people were down in the rent they prayed for fiscal miracles. They did it in the movies, and his family had done it around the dinner table. They prayed for a job to come through, or to win the lottery, or a check from anyone. It always came through. Always as a miracle, an unbelievable twist that could never be expected. But Whit saw a little piece of miracle in every dime he picked up, because eventually, it would get him there. He knew it. And if he wasn't dead in another twelve years, he might get another seventy-three dollars and eighty seven cents. He might never find another quarter in his life, or he might find them all. But he kept collecting every penny he came by, or five, ten, twenty-five times that.


Copyright 2008 Shoosh Russelcrust
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Comments (9)
Posted by Captain Morgen
2008-02-27 16:34:45
Good :)

I once had a teacher who collected change and pencils that he found around the school. He thought everyone was too wasteful. Your prose reminds me of that lesson he tried to teach his students. :)
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Posted by cookingWine
2008-02-27 22:30:23
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My mother always said, "look after the pennies and the pounds will look after themselves"

seems like we could be related.
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Posted by tarhead
2008-02-28 03:18:00
i must be the

hopeless sort. i walk past change, in fact, i have a distinct dislike for coins. seems they weigh more than they pay.

good story though!
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Posted by cookingWine
2008-02-28 07:17:10
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^

I'm not quite sure how the profile stealing thing works, but it always looks super awesome when someone comments their own story.

Thanks!
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Posted by cookingWine
2008-02-28 07:18:18
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FRAUD!

^

I'm not quite sure how the profile stealing thing works, but it always looks super awesome when someone comments their own story.

Thanks!
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Posted by lorislittlesecret
2008-02-28 07:22:35
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Hey I save change all year. Pays for miscellaneous crap when I go on vacation. This year I think I have about 100.00 already saved and I still have a few more months to go!

Decent story...a little confusing at the beginning since I wasn't sure who asked him for the nickle, nor did you show his initial reluctance at giving it up...either that or I can't read, which is highly possible too
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Posted by Pez
2008-02-29 14:49:58
Excellent writing, again.

This reminded me of the value in small things when they come in great numbers...

Very, very good!
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Posted by DL Chance
2008-03-05 13:33:08
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Very nice.
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Posted by Egoist
2008-03-10 21:11:28
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I agree with what Pez says.

Hmm, you know the ending sort of came at a surprise to me. I never exactly thought about receiving the last quarter and stuff when I pick one off the ground.

I thought it was really interesting how he determined the rest of his pay by just coins. I usually pick up any coin I see, but I never thought of it that hard. A good read.
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