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'The shadow behind me'


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Written by Zoya   
Saturday, 23 February 2008

 

*Note*- This the story which i wrote for the ITC CYAC {classmate young author conest}, to

their given topic 'The shadow ebhind me'/ Often its our thoughts that makes the major

difference. Just one thing: Fear does not exist. We create it....and yeah everything  that

looks like a I after a word, is actually the exclamatory mark...Its a part of the font...

 

The shadow behind me   It was late, very late. I was

tired, very tired. God! This Deepthi of mine, she

 always ends in trouble, and rubs it on me. I

suppose she reckons me to be a Jinni, helping

 her out all the time.  All I want now is to crash

 on my bed. My feet were hurting, as I entered the

lift, I was about to press the arrow down I thought

Minus one or minus two? Minus one. Am sure it’s

 minus one, positive. It’s minus one. I pressed

the button and waited to reach the basement.

 Eighteen more floors to glide and then a half

 an hour drive home. I closed my eyes and tried

 to relax.    The elevator stopped at minus

 one, I got out .no one was there. I looked around

 for my car; I realized that I had parked it

 somewhere near the emergency exit. Now where

is the emergency exit? It must be really far...... 

As I moved forward I felt someone around. I

turned around, no one was there. But some kind

of fear and anxiety filled me. It reminded me

 the murder that took place in the basement of

the ‘Ivory tower’, just a week ago, the girl was

 ruthlessly killed, and her body was found the

 next day under a car!.  The crime rate is a

 price we pay for the developing city. A situation

like this when no one is around, should be a perfect

chance for those murderers who lurk around in the

night searching for innocent victims and I seem

to be a perfect one!   Oh ****! Who’s that? I think

I heard distant footsteps. I turned in a jiff,

I could see a man in black overcoat in distance,

and I turned and walked ahead in search for my car.

Oh my God, what will happen next? I walked faster,

 and the footsteps seemed more audible, I pretended

 not to hear it and continued to search for my car

pretending to look confident. But inside I was

 shitty scared. Even if there wasn’t anyone, I would

 surely die because of the tension and anxiousness

that had engulfed me. I continued to walk, looking

 around casually as if I’m totally oblivious to those

footsteps. I reached the emergency exit and to my

 horror the car wasn’t there! Oh, I must have parked

it in minus two! I headed towards the stairs to my

 right. As I went down, I thought someone was following

me. Oh God, Save me! What if I become a victim to

 those debauched and hard-hearted people? What will

 happen to me? My family? Will they be able to live

without me? I’m not even graduated or married!

All my dreams and hopes will get terminated before

I even start working on them! Will my body be found

under a car tomorrow morning? Every second seemed

like hours to me. I scanned the parking lot. Why

are the parking lots so confusing?

Some more footsteps ........

chill Aaliya, maybe it’s just some other guy

searching for his car too. I consoled myself. Yeah

right! Who am I kidding? I walked around searching

 for my car. Should I call Deepthi or the cops? But

the person can overhear me; I bet he will be able

to get me, before Deepthi even gets down! Those

 footsteps grew louder, my heart pounded heavily in my chest.

 I walked faster so did those footsteps behind me.

His pace was equal to mine.

I stopped, and looked around; those dim lights did

not help. Then I heard something fall down, I turned

around petrified. The jaws of a tiger couldn’t have frightened me more. Is that his gun or knife?

 I couldn’t see anyone, but I knew I hadn’t imagined

 that noise, as I turned again looking around

desperately for my car. I saw a shadow of a tall man.

What did I have with me to defend myself?

My nails were big enough to scratch him, but would

that do any good? The mirror in my wallet-will it help?

Now how much time would it take me to get to my car,

unlock it, get in slam the door and screech my way out of

all this? Just a few seconds! Just then........

.Trring! Trring!

My mobile phone ran. The man might attack me anytime. ......

I took my phone and spoke ‘Hello? Whose this?’ the

voice replied ‘Aalia where are you?’ It was my mom,

I felt some what comforted, but then the signal was

 weak, I could not hear what my mother was saying,

‘Hello? Ma? Hello?’ I spoke desperately. My only

hope also drained out along with my battery. Oh

 Great!I started walking faster, obviously having

no idea where I was heading when I heard those

footsteps growing louder and faster; And then

 I saw my red car parked in a corner, it would

take me about a minute to to get there, If I run

 will the man be able to get me? I’m not really

fast, but I suppose when it comes to my life I can

run fast. Well that’s what I hope.

Every milli-second seemed like light-years to Me.,

The footsteps grew louder with my heartbeats....

I did not dare turn around.

Its now or never.......

 I have to get there.......

 I walked as fast as my legs could take me.

 I dug my hand into my purse for my keys.

Where is it?

I got something which felt like my key, indeed it was my key. But no my cars, my wardrobes!

 Oh the keys are in myjeans pocket. I took them out, as I was about to unlock my door.....

 I felt someone’s hand on my shoulder.

 I screeched very loudly,,,,, which echoed in the deep silence.

Oh God, please forgive me for all the mistakes I’ve committed. Please help me Lord.............

‘Aalia? ’ the familiar voice spoke.

Gathering my courage I looked around to see my friend Brian standing looking at me confused.

‘God!....... Its you!’ I said.

Thank Goodness! I sighed.

‘Not God, its me Brian’ he replied.

‘Sorry I kind of freaked out…’

‘Its okay …I saw you, But I wasn’t sure if it was

you….so I dint want to call out your name, in case

it wasn’t you and I was following you to just confirm’

He said.

I sighed.What a sudden change! From the state of helplessness, to a timely support from a friend

in deed.I realized the great power of imagination.

Fearful thoughts would make you fearful, but happy thoughts would surely make one happy.

‘Most of our fears are just imaginary, our own story.

Who is the author? Us.....! 

‘Fear does not exist it is only the fearful thoughts and avoidance behavior’ My dad used to say often quoting author John Wayne Dyer.  

 Conquering the fear is conquering the world!

I realized the shadow behind me was the

 reflection of my very own

 imagination.

 



Copyright 2008 Zoya
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Comments (6)
Posted by Jimbo
2008-02-23 21:43:58
Nice story

Grammer and spelling need a little work but that will imrpove with practice. The story was enjoyable. Thanks!
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Posted by charmed242
2008-02-23 22:15:15
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Thanx.

i;ve got them corrected. actually....while pasting the story, there was some problem..the words n letters got mixed up.

Hope its right now.
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Posted by thirteen
2008-02-27 00:12:11
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Good story, buts it best to be on your guard, ready if anything happens.Well done on a nice story
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Posted by prithwish.nath
2008-02-28 00:28:17
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Hey z-girl!

Finally I get to read it!!

Great story!!
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Posted by silvermoon
2008-03-05 12:04:01
Awesome

It's great! Out of curiosity, did you win the contest?
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Posted by Egoist
2008-03-16 08:47:37
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Her questioning everything makes it seem realistic. I enjoyed this one, especially her indecisive mind. I was waiting for the 'murderer' to kill Brian then...but I guess it's bad for me to expect that...Sorry.

I believe you are so right on explaining what fear is. But sometimes that adrenaline rush we get, determines our personality...Garage complexes can be scary during daytime too.

I really enjoyed this one, it was a very fun read.
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