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Through the Eyes of Death

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All is Well


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Written by Thomas Laroque   
Thursday, 07 February 2008
“Life is unfair, yes I know this and you should know it well, too. We, as people
and citizens of the United States of America must go along with society. I’m sorry to say
that you must accept this fact.” An old man sat at his desk smoking a Marlboro
cigarette.
His shoes knocked loudly against the top of his desk.
        “But…but…I don’t deserve this. What have I done? I’ve done nothing!”
        “Yes, you’ve done nothing. Nothing at all. That’s why I’m firing you.”
        “But I did everything. I filed all the documents. I’ve supervised the colleagues;
I’ve given instructions to new coworkers. I’ve made all your appointments. I’ve run and
kept track of the technological systems. All of these year long!”
        The boss turned his chair around, facing his back towards the young man. He
appeared to be resting his chin on the palm of his hand. The evening sun showered red
shadows on the side of his cheek, as he seemed deep in thought. The young man’s words
didn’t appear to stir him.
       
“I’m sorry. Leave this building at once.” The old gentleman said as he puffed out another intoxicating cloud of smoke. He heard the footsteps as they walked fast at first, then slower and slower. Then they moved faster again until the swinging of the door could be heard.The old company manager finally turned his head around. He scanned the room and then resumed to his normal position, ready to start work again.His office was tightly decorated with Victorian styled furniture, all yellow over time since he began using this
office. All Victorian except the fact that there was no carpet. He looked around the cramped room, and then resumed to his desk. He picked up a small letter from
underneath the piles of papers that littered the dark wooden surface.
He let out of long sigh as he began to open it with his short pocketknife.
         “I wonder what complaint it is this time,” he muttered to himself.
After slicing the last inch of sealed paper, he pulled out the letter:

    Dear Brother,
    Since the course of events linked to your actions, I have
become concerned with your behavior. In the past six
months, it appears that you have been on a firing spree,
currently firing almost all of your council members and
more than half of your employees. The situation seems a
little too suspicious to me. Your company was in great
shape and had plenty of income to pay the employees twice
as much more than their usual salary. Yet your sudden and
compulsive action has caused not only many people, but
yourself to suffer from the losses. Being a company
president
myself, I will be willing to give you advice and to hear
your standing of this situation. If possible, send this
mail back to me along with hours in which I may come to
your assistance. I’ll see you then, Matt.
                                         Your 
                                                brother,
                                                Jacob Lanswell.

“Bah. Rubbish!” Matt crumbled the letter in the
palm of his rough, wrinkled hand and threw it into the
trashcan. “Who’d be stupid enough to ask help from a
brother with the same occupation? He just wants my money,
doesn’t he.”

He roamed around the room and occasionally brushed against
the side of his desk, causing the glass of wine to begin
to rattle against the hard surface.

"Or maybe...maybe he wishes me to join forces with his business so that it would benefit to his advantage," Matt placed both of his hands on his cheeks and shook his head in horror.

    He paced back to the side of his desk, again brushing against it. The glass of wine rattled once more, this time slightly twirling in tiny circles.

    "No. I musn't fall prey to his evil enticements. What I do with my employees is all according to my will."

    He rubbed his hand against his unshaven chin, deep in thought, when he brushed against the desk again, this time actually bumping into it. The glass shook more violently.

    He ran his fingers through his hair and the veins in his red face tightened and pulled under the skin. The glass of wine twirled more rapidly and just as Matt passed by the desk again, it tipped of the edge and splashed red liquid onto his snow-white suit.

    "Arghhh!" He screeched in frusturation. With a swift motion, he snatched up the glass and stared into it. Through the tension in his rough fingers, the glass smashed into both broad and small pieces that slashed through his skin.

    "How dare he interfere," his hand shook as blood dripped through the gaps of his fingers.



Copyright 2008 Thomas Laroque
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Comments (3)
Posted by Cleveland
2008-02-07 07:03:20
All is well

I've read your story and in commenting I ran out of space. So this is the second time around and I'm running out of time now.

However. Your story to be a mystery need more leads, more intrigue,more content. The firing goes nowhere, the letter does not develop and the wine glass is not enough to contribute to a mystery ending.

Send me a message if you need to know more. I'm a creative writer and full of ideas.

Do also consider writing the story in the first person to avoid the distance you've put between the reader and the writer. In the first person dramatic narrative style the reader is in the skin of the narrator.Consider well.

Good luck with your writing.
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Posted by June Lunare
2008-02-07 10:36:59
Hey, what's up?

So...I read this one before since you've showed me this story. And I have to say that this story SHOULD NOT belong in the mystery section. Considering the fact that you are not finished with this story and that it lacks general things, I'd say that you should delete this and post it in a different section.

Oh, and by the way, if Cleveland annoys you, I don't blame ya. But alot of what he is saying is basically true.

See ya later.
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Posted by Xena
2008-06-20 17:23:15
ohh

hmm i might have to get cleveland to read my shit... not that it needs improvement... because it is pheenom.. who am i telling this to now? ah anyway so thats june lurane.. now i see... i think
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