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Dive into the clearing.

Slowly peer around yourself.

Feel your heart

Pound.

Shadows move through

Space.

Unknown essences

Prick at your senses.

Look behind you,

Blink at the fog.

It engulfs you,

Blankets you.

You are hidden

But you have no advantage.

You'll never again

Open your eyes.

And your heart

Will stir no more.

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Posted by tarhead 2008-02-04 22:50:27 pretty sharp don't know why - but wood nymphs came to mind... probably the caffeine... write on! + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-02-05 01:26:36 .... I don't say this very often, but its the fact that I cant work out what this is about that I enjoy about this poem + Report this comment
Posted by Munky 2008-02-05 03:04:33 .... What Dirk said. It certainly holds something charming. + Report this comment
Posted by June Lunare 2008-02-05 05:38:33 Hmmm... I wonder what was in the fog. Wow. You've just surpassed me, Thomas. This was amazing. It drew me into the poem. Very nicely done. Oh, yeah! About that poem we worked on together, I think it's going to be posted in no time soon. + Report this comment
Posted by Earnest Granger 2008-02-05 06:05:20 Wonderful Beautiful, like August's work (AKA June Lunare) + Report this comment
Posted by lorislittlesecret 2008-02-05 09:00:06 .... Neat poem...very etherial + Report this comment
Posted by Baethan Dawn 2008-02-06 19:25:31 .... liked the word choice in it...not overdone or to simple + Report this comment
Posted by Baethan Dawn 2008-02-07 17:26:45 that wasn't me up there. + Report this comment

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