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(3) Alone

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Written by Salliy Millys

Saturday, 02 February 2008

When I awoke from the horse crash I was in the hospital. I got better in a few days. Now I am crying. I want to go back to being Miss Invisible instead of Miss Everyone Pays Atention to me now.  After my accident my mother rushed over to the farm and wanted to take me home. Martain said yes right away and then he looked sorry. Bethen said I should stay but that night my mom took me home. The last tie I ever saw that family was when we were driving away. Martain, Bethen, Milizz, Harold, and Becca waving at us and me waving back. When we got home I didn't even notice there was someone in our living room sleeping on the couch. I just plooped on my bed and fell asleep. I woke up to a blonde girl with glasses sitting on my bed. "Ahhhhhh!" I screamed. "Mom who is she?" I asked my mom. What she told me was bad, really bad. Who knew I had a little sister? Copyright 2008 Salliy Keyword: Report this story | Add to Favorites | Send to Friends | Author's Profile No Comments posted Comments (2) Posted by tarhead 2008-02-03 20:47:33 nice detour! looking forward to the next! + Report this comment Posted by Pez 2008-02-21 08:22:15 What?? Ha! Oh, man. You always come up with the strangest outcomes; it's good to keep your readers guessing, but the outcomes, I think, should have some relevance to the rest of the story... it is your story and you get to add and subtract whatever you'd like to and from it... but maybe think about why you're adding a certain idea, character, or situation. What is the reader supposed to get from it? How does it help to hold or build up your story?... + Report this comment Post a comment Post a comment

 

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