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Short Stories Romance Im In Love with My BestFriend
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Im In Love with My BestFriend |
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| Written by alyreche | |
| Friday, 13 April 2007 | |
| Last Updated ( Friday, 11 May 2007 ) |
Comments (33) |
 05-23-2007 07:40, lovely short story, very romantic. it made me blush. :roll » Reply to this comment... 05-23-2007 17:51, love the story very good keep up the good work :) » Reply to this comment... 05-24-2007 18:06, reche, you are an execellent writer. you have BEEN writing since you could hold a pencil. the world awaits your "story'" » Reply to this comment... 06-06-2007 16:03, Very Sweet and innocent.It reminds me of my childhood sweetheart. DJ. » Reply to this comment... 06-12-2007 05:07, interesting, but I would have liked to have know what happened to Donnie and his girlfriend... :eek » Reply to this comment... 06-12-2007 06:26, :grin Now this is postitive, constructive, creative and a vehicle to get out of life what you want... more important, what GOD has set aside for you. Continue to be honest and true to yourself and your body of work will conitnue to grow and serve your purpose. :) » Reply to this comment... 06-12-2007 07:00, :zzz Short, sweet, and entertaining. Can't wait to hear more about Donnie and other stories, I'm sure you're holding back on. » Reply to this comment...  06-12-2007 07:58, this story is a true story and recently i became reaquainted with my dear friend Donnie and I think this is the beginning of where we left off as bestfriends. I love him even more than I did before. He is the one that got away but I will always respect the fact he is in a relationship. I would never mess with love. » Reply to this comment... 06-12-2007 11:44, HELLO, I LOVE THIS STORY.. YOU ARE SO GIFFTED.. KEEP ON WRITING IF YOU CAN... NO IM INSPIRED TO DO THE SAME.. THANKS AGAIN FOR THE WONDERFUL STORY.. » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 08:25, It's a nice story but the grammar is poor! This is more of a composition than a short story! Working on it should make it better! :( » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 11:54, This is sooo cuuute...It's a story I can relate too...I hope u win.. » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 11:54, the grammar could never be poor but people's judgements. A short story is short and a composition is way less words than this story....go back to school. thank you and have a great day » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 11:58, UUUUUU JUST GOT PLAYED...GO BACK TO SCHOOL LADY.... » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 12:06, :zzz i want u to know that ur grammar is great and dont worry about no critics who r jealous. keep doing what u do and keep ur bestfriend close, ur pencil! u r talented and creative and u deserve to win that award. proud of u, we all r! » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 12:07, i wish u were talking about me Che' but im glad to know someone so talented like yourself. keep it up, im proud of u. 8) » Reply to this comment... 06-13-2007 12:10, Do you still talk with Donnie, it sounds like that fire still burns and u should never let love go. Find him bc he probably feels the same. I like your writing, write somemore. I'll be back on here checking :) » Reply to this comment... 06-15-2007 08:04, Referring back to the original posting of "poor grammar," this is not the work of an honor role student and the composition (NOT SHORT STORY)needs to be corrected by her instructor! By the way, this is supposed to be constructive feedback, not negative! » Reply to this comment... 06-15-2007 09:44, i apologize for being jealous that i cant read or write! ur story brings up memories of me not having someone love me. im very ignorant! i apologize once again. keep up the good work » Reply to this comment... 06-15-2007 10:36, as a matter of fact i dont aploogize, ur story is too short and i can do better. u not gonna make it on some love story. sorry u dont have it. better luck next time :( » Reply to this comment...  06-15-2007 11:22, I'm afraid, I'll have to agree with user: "Sunshine"... Your story seems to be compelling to those that feel they lack the emotions surrounding your story, or whom feel it brings forth heart- warming memories that in the end are really mere illusions. You want to share your story and that's understandable, but anecdotes, without any real writing talent, are unworthy of winning the 'short story contest'. In no way am I trying to discourage you from writing; blogging or diary- writing seem to be more of your style, though. I apologize if you take offense; that is not, by all means, my intention. » Reply to this comment... 06-15-2007 12:09, i appreciate ur comments Yahaira, and actually respect them, but this short story was just a story written for the contest and really you have never read any of my serious work so blogging or diary is not something i would do nor have never done. Thank you though for reading and I appreciate your honesty and as far as Sunshine, well I think she lacks some bulbs up there and needs an extra dose of Meds. Thank you. » Reply to this comment... 06-16-2007 01:31, You said: ?far as Sunshine, well I think she lacks some bulbs up there and needs an extra dose of Meds.? I must take issue with this statement, as Sunshine had only read your story and noticed some egregious grammatical errors (I am a English Professor who teaches writing skills at the college level) and was only pointing them out to you, as this was a story that you had submitted to a writing contest. I thought it might help if I pointed out some of what she was referring to. See below: Even though we met under unusual circumstances [Add comma (Use a comma to set off most introductory elements)] I felt it was love at first site. Well [Add comma)] I had a huge crush. His name was Donnie White [Add comma (Use a comma before and, but, or another coordinating conjunction linking main clauses)] and he was one of the nicest boys I had ever met. It was 1995 [This is a repeated error. Please check the rest of your paper for similar errors.] and I was a junior in high school. We were from different districts and so we had never met before this tragic in his family left his uncle dead from a gunshot wound to the head. [This sentence is confusing.] » Reply to this comment... 06-18-2007 05:58, natural sencibility, keep expresing whats in your heart :) » Reply to this comment... 06-18-2007 06:39, look this is a place for writers, as far as Sunshine, or any other comments not referred to the story, stay off this site or please get it together. i dont need anyone defending or explaining, thank u. » Reply to this comment... 11-23-2007 08:11, I didnt like it to much, i expected more because of the title, it was good but not interesting :( » Reply to this comment... 11-27-2007 09:57, i love it and your story is sooo awsome :zzz » Reply to this comment... 12-28-2007 22:36, I liked the idea and the story was cute, but you I think that you need to work on it a bit more. Don't worry I'm only young,so my grammar is much worse than yours! Keep up the good work and keep writing! :) » Reply to this comment...  03-22-2008 00:37, i remembered when i fell in love with my best friend.. it didnt work we broke up and it ruined our friendship.. no jk lol.. » Reply to this comment...  04-03-2008 07:55, Very nice read, don't lose sight of memories, they can be there for us throughout life. » Reply to this comment... 04-03-2008 08:57, sweet story but it needs to be developed a bit more...the spelling and punctuation are a distraction » Reply to this comment...  04-09-2008 12:44, My eyes are watery! Great story! » Reply to this comment...  04-21-2008 12:14, Those are the best. Friends first, lovers second. Today most of us do things backwards. *sighs* I had a friend like this. Wonder what he is doing today? » Reply to this comment...  05-05-2008 17:48, interesting story. i just can't quite understand how people can have strong feelings for one another but still, they stay just "friends" but anyway i enjoyed it. » Reply to this comment... |
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