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Strength
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Written by Dirk   
Thursday, 31 January 2008
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Please, he says, don't ever leave me

I worry at heart that you decieve me,

and yet I trust that you believe me;

having faith is never easy

 

Why, he asks, would you love me?

Do you see something I can't see?

I worry you pretend to be,

the one who was always meant for me

 

What, he asks, are you now thinking?

Is it a sign when you are drinking?

Or when you sit and stare not blinking,

of some dark place in which you're sinking?

 

You, he says, are my best friend.

More than myself as our lives blend.

Forgive me for my worries then,

be my strength until the end



Copyright 2008 Dirk
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Comments (7)
Posted by tarhead
2008-02-02 00:19:35
good going!

sometimes i get weary of trying to figure out what a poem means.

it's nice to have the path well lit.
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Posted by C.R. Vard
2008-02-02 18:54:29
great poem.

liked the repition of 'me' in the first paragraph...tarhead must have read too many of my poems ;).
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Posted by R.E.Potter
2008-02-03 05:56:56
,,,

Tarhead sums it up perfectly.
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Posted by Elizabeth
2008-02-12 11:02:06
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Oh, this is a beautiful piece of writing, I think.

I liked the way the words rhymed in the third paragraph; it's so easy with English when there are those ing-words...

The other paragraphs also fitted the pattern well, though in them the rhymes weren't so ... well, rhyming. :)

As an entity this poem summons up a desire that everyone has sometimes, a desire of having a true friend. Lucky are those who have it...
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Posted by Pez
2008-02-12 14:01:41
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I would like to analyze the poem thoroughly; or would you rather me just say it's good?

I'd probably take up a whole page...

so I'll just say, that this piece made me sad.
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Posted by thirteen
2008-03-18 16:59:47
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I dont get poems(im a bit thick)but since I have been here I have tryed to expand my brain(try).

I really dig this, just lovely writing.
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Posted by Sad Sara
2008-06-08 18:55:57
Beautiful

You are a fantastic Poet.

Yer even made this cold Fish cry.

I usually don't where love is concerned, just tragic endurances people find themselves contending from time to time.

But once in a great while, a verse such as this, written fer matters pertaining to the squishy sentiments found beating in some hearts can touch mine.

Rarely though. lol

Love it

'Anna
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