Marks Trilogy Part 1 - A Secret Life

The smell was almost overpowering and it hit them as...

The Letter

He couldn't believe it. He looked down at the letter...

Ashes
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Written by Cody Horonzy   
Friday, 25 January 2008
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Ashes

 

       I met her in an apocalyptic field. That was back when the earth had just started to crack. It seemed like she was all alone waiting for the sky to fall…………….

 

       Now we sit here waiting for it to die. The planet is fading away with time. It’s weird that I met her in this horrible period of life. Maybe if I could have met her sooner something could have been. But there was no time for that. It just wasn’t meant to be. So as we waited we told ourselves stories of all our past experiences. She had many, many stories to tell. And they were all very interesting. She never bored me at any second. She was so beautiful though. I couldn’t help noticing it. She had the most beautiful eyes. I lost myself in them.

 

        Fires began to break out beside us. But as the red glow lighted her face she looked even more stunning. We were now surrounded by fire. But I didn’t feel scared with her. I felt safe with her I wanted to stay inside the ring of flames with her forever. But we started to burn. I could feel my skin melting.

 

I told her to tell me another story. I didn’t want her to realize that her skin was melting off. She told me of a story of her adventures somewhere far away from here. She was a very intelligent person. It’s just a shame it had to end like this. As I listened to her beautiful voice I began to cry. I could see her skin melting away. But I never thought anything less of her. She never would have been anything less. With her distorted face she realized why I was crying. She began to cry also. She told me she was going to look for me on the other side. She said all her life she wasted on someone else but she said she wanted to start over in the next life. I told her I’d be waiting for her in the afterlife. Usually I never smiled much but I knew I’d be waiting for her with a smile. Only she would get to see me smile.

 

       I reached out to touch her remaining hair. It felt so beautiful but I began to lose strength and my arms turned into wax. I told her just to believe that none of this was real, and that we would be together soon. We both looked like horrid creatures but we held each other as we burned slowly into, eventually, a pile of ashes.  

 

 



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Posted by the Processor
2008-01-25 11:17:01
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Decent..nice read...I wrote something posted on here titles Ashes as well..check it out and write on!
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Posted by kamacosmic
2008-01-25 20:16:45
Nice!

Why dont you add this to romance as well ;)
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Posted by Egoist
2008-01-26 16:14:12
Enjoyment

I believe this was my favorite out of all of yours. It saddens me.

The opening is incredible, the picture I got in my mind was so powerful. I really enjoy the part of which he didn't want her to realize she was melting.

As well as the opening, I enjoyed the ending. The ending was a great picture to think of too.

Nice one.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-01-29 16:45:50
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Wow I really liked this concept. Very romantic to have someone mean so much to you that a massive event like the end of the world can seem like background details, unimportant as long as you're with her. Great stuff
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Posted by RADDcore
2008-02-04 22:43:30
lol ?

heyy lol .. the image you get when reading thiss is sooooo just i cant describe it .. it was soo powerfull .. buh i sorta dont get it ? sounds pretty stupid but i dont. Are the candles or something. Dieing.
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Posted by tarhead
2008-02-05 01:37:07
i had bookmarked

a ton of stories that i had missed, and am playing catch-up.

there is only one question i have regarding this story, as i think that the visuals you handed us were incredible - ready? how did this end up in humor?

write on!
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-02-10 15:27:30
lol

yeah to tarhead i think i accidentally picked humor for the category to this. Yeah i mean i definetily didn't intend to make this story funny at all.

And to raddcore. Of course you don't sound stupid. Why would you sound stupid? Sometimes the things i write I don't even understand lol

so don't feel stupid.

but this was about the world ending but at the same time this guy met the supposed girl of his dreams. But because the world was on fire the girl and him started to burn. and eventually they burned to death but he hoped after their deathe he would meet her again somewhere maybe in an afterlife. i hoped that cleared it up for you.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-05-27 19:37:11
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oh wow, so many beautiful descriptive details i could really see this going on in my head (fireballs flaming down and crashing all around them) it was really moving. but you might want to change the category lol
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