Blue

            Water comes rushing in my ears

            Everything here is gone except for my tears

            You went into the sky

            I never got to say goodbye

            But as I float here above the blue

            I realize how much I sit here and think of you

            It always seemed like you would’ve been the best for me

            But I just never could make them see  

You gave me the choice to go with you or stay behind

But I wanted to wait for the perfect time

Patience ran out and tension grew

Maybe I wasn’t the best for you

With my foolish actions here holding me down

I think I may just lose my strength and drown

Sinking deeper here into the blue

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Posted by r.e.potter 2008-01-25 10:07:13 confused Im confused with a few of the lines of this poem...having said that however, I thought this was one of your better poems. + Report this comment
Posted by Pez 2008-01-25 11:22:59 My interpretation. So is this a person, maybe lying in a pool of water (such as a river) looking up into the sky (which is why the tears are flowing into his/her ears) and reminiscing about a loved one that took his/her own life? Because the one that maybe committed suicide suggested a double suicide, and in the end the person speaking begins to think he/she wasn't good enough for him/her to stop him/her from dying. And now the person speaking is 'alone' and depressed... 'sinking'... maybe on the verge of drowning him/herself. Am I way off? + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-01-25 22:27:09 Ur right on no you basically summed it up. that's pretty much what it is about. i wanted to write a poem about the water and this is what i came up with. + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-01-26 05:07:09 actually This is a perfect discription of the movie 'open water' where their left in shark infested deep open water by a miscalculation of the husband. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-01-27 18:44:01 Blue This personally is one of my favorites that i have written so far. This is about an individual who has lost a person very close to them simply because of their stupid decisions. The individual realizes his decision to wait was wrong and then he seeks deep into a dark depression. Although i'm interested that this poem is exactly like a movie. I'll have to take a look at this movie "open water." But this wasn't about someone getting attacked by sharks. This was something that came out of my own thoughts. + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-03-05 03:06:51 Azul Hello, Oh, this is absolutely beautiful, it has an oceanic, in and out of life flow to it, as well as an ethereal, between two worlds. Very cool effect I must say. Take care, 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by sgulab 2008-04-05 11:06:13 .... awww that was soo beautiful as sad sara said. i loved it :D + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-05-27 19:28:23 yes the comments have basically pinned down my feelings on this poem. So...NICE JOB! + Report this comment

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