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A Vampire's Death


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Written by Chris   
Sunday, 06 January 2008
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Venus placidly brushed her hair in front of her floor mirror. She noticed a speck of dirtiness on her face, she attempted to remove it several times, but it would not come off. She turned towards her bathroom, but as she moved the spot stayed fixed on the mirror.

She extended her hand forward to brush it off. She tried whisking it away with the tip of her finger, but it remained stubbornly attached. She then tried polishing it off with the palm of her hand, but her hand slipped through the mirror. She instantly sprang backwards. She looked down, only to unearth, that her hand was missing.

She could see the veins, the bones... everything. She looked at the mirror. Her hand sat suspended in the middle of the mirror. She flinched in horror. As she did so, the hand moved. She experimented further, waving hello. The hand waved back.

She looked down at the stump her hand had left behind. It wasn't bleeding. She passed her remaining hand through the space left behind by the hand. It hit something. Using her hand, she felt its outline, and discovered that it was shaped exactly like the hand in the mirror.

She tried lifting her hairbrush with her invisible hand. The hairbrush suspended itself in mid-air. The hand in the mirror did likewise. She paused. What would happen if she put her face in? Would she be able to see? Would she see the whole world in a mirror's reverse? Would only her bony cranium and soft brain be left?

She tried something else.

She stepped into the mirror, and fell into an emptiness.



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Comments (8)
Posted by 1800
2008-01-07 13:12:52
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Good story, but where does the vampire come in?
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Posted by C.R. Vard
2008-01-07 13:49:21
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I should have explained it..... I was going at only vampires can see their reflection, so to a human this would look a bit strange
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Posted by Eternitiesheart
2008-01-08 06:31:38
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nice story, but i dont get it really, vampire's can see their reflection?
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Posted by C.R. Vard
2008-01-08 12:06:23
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no one has ever told me either way so I decided to make it up..... I dono has anyone ever heard either way?
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Posted by ONeal
2008-01-09 06:11:43
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SOURCE> http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vampire

Quoting from it: Although not traditionally regarded as an apotropaic, mirrors have been used to ward off vampires when placed facing outwards on a door (vampires do not have a reflection and in some cultures, do not cast shadows, perhaps as a manifestation of the vampire's lack of a soul).

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Knowing a nit more about vampires now and re-reading the story, the plot could be viewed as she was not aware she was a vampire or not yet completly a vampire and through her interaction with the mirror these were fulfilled. Just thinking out loud there, I don't want my mind wandering to steer away from the authors intended plot.

Forgetting about the vampire connection and whether they do, don't see their reflections; I really enjoyed the descriptive writing of the actions. Next to no emotion was described as she went through the acts, thus uncertain how she was reacting to her encounter other than obviously she was curious, unafraid.
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Posted by lorislittlesecret
2008-01-09 12:13:16
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See I think if you hadn't brought in the vampire thing, this is a good horrorish story. Is horrorish a word? Anywho...I would like to know what she sees on the other side of the mirror....
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Posted by tarhead
2008-01-10 01:10:38
i became allergic

to vampires - no wait, vampire stories...

that is probably why i got on the boat late. i saw the title contained the word vampire and put off arriving. i got a little vampired out, over vamped, overvampulated, suffering from extreme vampulation, contaracted draculatosis... okay, i will stop with that.

i got here through your profile. i have not read a story from you in a while that was not just flat out good.

vampire or vampire not, is of no consequence. that was a really good story. i liked the objectiveness of the character, her overall "whatifness" made the story for me.

first the shock of finding her hand missing - then realizing she had a new toy to play with, was a nice touch.

i will shut up now...
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-02-23 19:35:26
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yea the story didn't confuse me at all.

i liked it. very interesting
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