Posted by Dirkin
2008-01-03 04:03:46
strange but intriguing
It sounds like a dream or something you want remember but can't. Does that make sense?
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Posted by Captain Morgen
2008-01-03 11:01:27
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cool. Good imagery
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Posted by dockyard
2008-01-03 17:24:26
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a waking dream, maybe. i feel like i'm in those a lot of the times. you could say this was one of them. surreal under the harsh light of my bedroom at three in the am.
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Posted by tarhead
2008-01-05 13:06:32
good strong finish
"this will be a memory too"
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-07 11:10:43
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Yeah, it seems like a dream to me.
But one with a bunch of quick flashes of different screens that shoot through your eyes like a bullet.
I thought it was pretty well written.
Good Job!
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-07 13:16:11
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This was okay.
I tried to get into your imagery but I was lost at a nuclear winter and I don't quite know what a duvet is, though I tried looking it up and couldn't find the word. I thought you were inside at first but then you brought up a skyline, are you in a room without a ceiling?
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Posted by dockyard
2008-09-07 15:36:59
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a duvet is a feather quilt of sorts.
doo- vay
i can see the sky through my window. cause for some reason my blinds are always open.
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