Love Crawls Down the Drain

I can't believe she broke up with me! After five years...

Her Magic Touch, Chapter 5

Nathan R. Johnson, Urology/Proctology. (Office hours...

the Processor-Continued


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Written by Jim Lewis   
Friday, 28 December 2007

         


       He should have been well on his way by now. In route to the interview... but his damn OCD...always causing him to be late. Though never actually doctor diagnosed with the infliction he had known for a few years that he had carried the traits of the compulsive disorder. Perhaps undetected by others.. he was well aware of it ..and so was she. Every morning, for the past 10 years, it was the same routine. This morning however it was his hair that was causing his delay. It had to be perfect. Strange thing is...he barely had any. No, he wasn't balding..he just kept it short..shaved every 2 weeks by her. His problem with his hair today....the strays. Those damn stray hairs. Sure they would never be noticed by others nor should they have been of any concern...but to him.. they were this mornings enemy. Sticking out this way and that. He notices each and every menacing one. With scissors in hand he gently cuts and plucks every last one.

  "Honey, you're going to be late!...Do you need me to warm up your car?"

"No...no babe..almost'.....I'm coming..."

      No more time...he had to go. Like an Olympic sprinter he is down the stairs, across the living room and into the dining room to retrieve his keys, his resume and to steal a kiss from her.

"You'll do fine hon, don't worry bout it.. they'll love you as much as I do...Good luck"

Another firm kiss upon her lips.

 

                        "Thanks babe,..I'll call you when I'm done...let you know how it went.."

 "Okay...be careful going out...our front steps seem a little.." came out of her mouth just as he went out the front door.. and with one step he instantaneously took flight.

As his left foot graced the first step outside his home a slick patch of ice sent him airborne, past the 5 remaining steps, and right smack into 18 inches of the nights newly fallen snow.

For a few seconds he just laid there. Looking up into the sky as to ask, Why? Why today?, Why now? Why Me?

 

"Honey!...You okay?!" she was there...as always..helping him...helping him to his feet.

"Ah, ya...I'm...I'm fine..I just...I...Dammit!!"

"Oh no honey, ..look at your clothes..they're soaked!"

 "****!,...I'll...I'll just have to go change real quick...I've got... ****!..I'm gonna be ****** late!"  Sprinting again he bounds back into the house, back upstairs and into their bedroom. Hopelessly looking for something else to wear, to impress, his now drenched clothes was the best he had, specifically purchased for today's interview. He'd have to now settle for another less favorable collared shirt and a pair of badly wrinkled Dockers. As he undresses he gathers all the items from the pockets of his damp pants...his billfold, his smokes, his lighter...and his.."My keys,..where the hell are my keys?!"  He had put them in his right front pocket just before he fell and plunged into the..

"The snow!, I must have dropped them in the snow!"  This was a dilemma. For they had only one car..and for that car they had but only one set of car keys..no spare.

She was there. Searching their snow covered front lawn for any hint of the keys,for any chance of him making it to this interview, for any chance of him getting this job,..for the salary, the benefits, for their forthcoming child, their future.

Inside, phone to ear.."Hello, Mrs. Ryan?...Yes, this is Eli Cooper..Um, I um have a 8:30 interview with you today for the Processor position...well, um..I may be a little late...I ah, I'm having some minor problems getting there....funny story actually..."



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Comments (14)
Posted by the Processor
2007-12-28 14:40:42
Best story ever...

Just fooling...to who's eyes my rest upon this story...please read, please comment..much appreciated
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Posted by tarhead
2007-12-28 22:01:49
I liked it

keep the process in motion
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-01-02 12:21:48
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Better than the first part although that was good in itself. OCD yes, my daughter and son have that. Good Jim, good.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-01-02 15:46:27
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Poor guy. I once got a black eye fom a football the day before a job interview. Um one thought... I have trouble imagining someone flying airborne down five steps to land in snow from slipping on ice. Unless he was running faster than humanly possible, wouldn't he be more likely slip straight to the ground?
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Posted by the Processor
2008-01-03 13:39:19
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Dirkin...you must watch alot of CSI...just kidding..actually, the whole slipping and falling down the steps part is a little exagerated however is based on an actual experience occured...thanks for reading!
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Posted by the Processor
2008-01-04 06:16:48
Please read!!

This story and my others....comment as well...much obliged
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Posted by Ze.Queen
2008-01-04 12:45:21
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Oh the drama of the midmorning routine! Don't orget apostrophes! Apostrophes are our friends, my dear Processor friend.

So are you thinking about having a short-chaptered or a long chaptered book? You could certainly combine both chapters. Unless you jumped right into the bringing-the-reader-up-to-date bit and spent caputilo uno on that alone. Whatever's fine, though... It's all in the way of a writer!

I'd like a full description of the characters looks though or a little more on their personalities soon if that's not too much! Always love to mentally see the people I'm spying on! Hehe. :)

ZQ
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Posted by C.R. Vard
2008-01-04 12:51:28
good

although you might want to describe how some of the quotes were being said.
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Posted by 1800
2008-01-04 13:05:03
Geez

That guy is having a really bad day. I swear something similar to this happened to me...
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Posted by the Processor
2008-01-04 13:34:26
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again..I really appreciate all the comments and advice from all of you...your ideas will definetly be used for whats next to come for the processor..thanks
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Posted by WLGFX
2008-01-05 20:03:58
Funny and real...

For a first it's entertaining. It should have just been put into just one story (It might make the x words limit)

Nice ending too. Fast and precise conclusion.

The descriptive and reactive responses were great although the quoted speech needs work. Thats my opinion mate. I'm waiting to read more.
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Posted by Behind_the_Mask
2008-06-13 10:33:17
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Good,

It kept with the quality and style of the first chapter many times, like me, stories will change styles in between chapters. The falling down the icy stairs has happened to me so many times before. Love the realism.
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Posted by Darkness.of.Mystery
2008-06-13 15:27:12
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Again, great potential, but still some work needs to be done. You need to work on your punctuation. And get rid of all the ellipses. You need to put who is saying what, but do not always use the word 'said'. Use other words. Change it up. There needs to be variety. Also, a bit more detail would be nice.
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Posted by strawberrywino
2008-06-14 04:34:25
still a good story

but whys he call her "her"

he was 7 to 10 when his ocd started ? if it started that young wouldn't it be very noticable in 10 years time. i'm gussing that age frame if he dropped out the last year of school and this is a year after that did you mention what year and i forgot ? sorry if i did.
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