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Written by Morgen   
Thursday, 27 December 2007
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Talia had become someone she did not like years ago. If she could go back in time she would have done things a lot differently. Her life now was spent in a lonely place where weekly visits from her parents served as her only comfort.

It began the summer of her seventeenth birthday. It was the year she was finally starting to look different, in a good way. She remembered perfectly the day Krista (who was rated the hottest girl by 2/3 of guys attending their high school) asked her to hang out with her and her “bitches” as she liked to call them. Grade twelve started in the fall when the leaves began to turn red and the winds wailed.

Talia took pride in her newly toned body that she had developed from little food and long hours spent at the gym. After all, she had that commitment to thank for her new social status. That year Krista replaced her old friend Abby with Talia and a beach-blond girl from Florida named Justine. Talia didn’t know much about Abby, only that she had stolen Krista’s boyfriend Mike. A big no-no in the world of high school girls (and just about any girl in general, really) but it seemed to happen all the time. However Krista didn’t think it would’ve ever happened to her; She was the hottest girl in the school.

Talia loved the attention she got from being noticed although she couldn’t help but feel an overwhelming presence of solitude. It seemed the more respect and attention you received the further away everyone became. She pushed it to the back of her mind; it was the least of her worries.

Krista was becoming ever more irritable as the days past. She stopped associating with anyone except Talia or Justine. She couldn’t stop talking about Abby and Mike. It were almost as if she were obsessed.

“Talia, why do you think Mike likes that little ***** instead of me? What is it that makes me not good enough? Am I too short, to fat, to ******* crazy for him?!” She asked angrily.

          Talia didn’t know what to say but she tried to comfort her the best she could since Justine was too busy reading the calorie count for a container of splenda sweetened, no fat yogurt. (Which, by the way, Talia had already memorized had 35 calories).

          “I don’t know. Maybe he just knows you’re too hot for him.” She answered. She tried to convince her but it was a failed attempt.

          Krista snorted, “You’re too nice, girl, cut the **** already.”

          It was cold on January sixth. Krista phoned Talia in a frenzy of jumbled words. She had something to tell her but she couldn’t say it over the phone.

          She applied a little make-up to her face, changed into some comfortable clothing and headed out the door. She walked and half ran the block to Krista’s 3-story mansion of a house. She was eager to find out why she was needed so badly. She now wished she’d never had to know.

          The door was unlocked and no cars were in the garage, meaning her parents weren’t at home, so she stormed up the first flight of stairs to the second floor where Krista’s bedroom was. The door creaked a little as she used her palm to slide the door open. Krista sat atop her bed, a pile of bloody clothing had been tossed onto the carpet, and she wore only her bra and panties.

          “Krista, what happened?” she cautioned.

She looked up and tears formed in the pockets of space between her eyes and flesh. She sniffled.

          “I need to show you.”

She pulled her body up with her arms and picked up the robe that had been folded over the top of her computer chair. She brought her to a clearing, surrounded by trees, almost twenty meters from her home. Talia stared in horror at the dark, almost black splattering of blood on the crystal white snow. Then her eyes focused on the body. Abby Lunche’s body. She didn’t know what to say. She didn’t know what to do. She knew what she helped Krista do next was the worst mistake of her life but it was something she could never take back. If only time machines existed.

They dragged her body into the more wooded area, kicked untainted snow over the blood and ran to get garbage bags. They dumped her body in a creek and tried to forget.

It had only been three days before police arrested Krista and Talia for the murder. She had six more years to spend in her jail cell. She no longer believed things could ever go back to normal. A life taken and in exchange another was wasted.

Copyright 2007 Morgen
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Comments (7)
Posted by Terry Collett
2007-12-28 12:38:14
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Inspired writing.
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Posted by tarhead
2007-12-28 14:19:15
liked it

blunt with a point at the end.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-01-02 19:07:05
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You write teenage perspectives well, very authentic
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Posted by WLGFX
2008-01-06 12:03:05
Yep. Good writing.

Kinda like one of those teenage horror movies. You place the reader in a colourful world.
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Posted by onyxdragon
2008-01-29 09:44:05
Got it

You really know how to hit the nail on the head with your characters and the stories. Nicely done. I'm thoroughly enjoying the reading of your stories. Keep it up.
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Posted by wbboomer
2008-02-02 18:06:23
hell of a story

whoa. kinda sad ending for Talia. but i don't get the title. can you explain it to me by posting a comment?
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Posted by Captain Morgen
2008-02-02 18:14:38
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It is a term that isn't used very often which means to lose control, go crazy, etc.
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