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If By Chance We Should Meet Go back to the story Comment in question Posted by Roadkill315 04-02-2008 10:46,   ... A good reality check story; which means I would have gone with the Ruger .44 myself :-)    Seriously, the first six paragraphs were very well laid out, each adding a layer to the visual of the character and his plight. Then you defined Penny before firing a blank at her, "This is all your fault"... my favorite line of the story.    And how messed up am I, when Penny shot the other teller, I was cracking up!    Then I stopped laughing when the gurad did her in, that was the reality of the reality check. Good ending, and a great story. Minor minor afterthought, not sure the last paragraph, "The entire bank ..." neded to be written. My readers mind had already lived the description.    Thanks!   » Report this comment to administrator »    1 replies Posted by Tarhead Mugwump 04-02-2008 11:29,   i actually was going to have him take the ruger, but since it's my favorite toy, i decided i was too biased - and changed it out to the 454...    i keep staring at the last paragraph - i think i might reach for a new sentence. i'm just not sure today what i should be...    thanks for the input!   » Report this comment to administrator