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New Topic # 5 Go back to the story Comment in question Posted by whitj310 05-05-2008 13:00,   Ninja Cupcake World I almost shit when you said his ordinary world was that of a ninja. The world's greatest oxymoron, like James Bond agonizing over his menial job. Good writing, sometimes too much passive voice , but otherwise fantastic.  JJ   » Report this comment to administrator »    1 replies Posted by Dirkin 05-05-2008 17:45,   ... I'm not familiar with the term passive voice, so I had to look it up. I think I see what you mean, I may have to rewrite this, and perhaps some of my other stories as well. Thanks for the feedback glad you enjoyed it   » Report this comment to administrator